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Night Sweats
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Night Sweats |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Night Sweats I dreamed the PoUnDiNg at the door. YELLING, telling me "What For!" Awoke to sweating, drenched and more. Fear had broke to tears in pour. Awakened thoughts in generalize. Lips too frozen, silent cries. Shadows crossed the blur of eyes. Heart rhyme-beating rhythm lies. Walked the halls in thoughts of you. Face pressed hard through window view. Below that tree, where climb could do. No powdered prints, just words untrue. Disquiet look of foolishment, As words in type, from fingers, print. ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." (J.Garland) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-20-2002 06:47 AM).] |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Sonnet-like. The 4 line rhyme and constant motion line together well with the general sense of franticness that you communicate in the poem. Very entertaining read. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Maureen, Now, of course I cannot relate to this term, have no idea what is means (yeah right )  it does make a wonderful poem....good to see you writing. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Makes you wish it was all a bad dream, and I think that is the scarriest part. Nicely done nt. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Sooooooo wonderfully expressed, sweet friend, this is such w onderful expressions from your heart! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, you are a delight to us all! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i can hear the POuNDing of the door ha..and the YeLLiNg...enjoyed hon..hugs..as always ~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Certainly a message within this...I feel the restlessness and sadness...very well written... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
somethings are NEVER what they appear to be...helen |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I agree with 1slick_lady...our hearts get hurt too often by things that seem to be something we hope for....words can be so deceiving...My heart hurt for you reading this poem. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
nakdthoughts - words from within, but I see a spark... BC |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Canuckster..just call it a "Moonchild Sonnet" I enjoy entertaining you with my franticness which this was written, as I awoke with it on my lips. Thank you. M Kay... sure you can relate *laughing* thanks for your support... by the way I actually woke up in night sweats, with no need to impress...I wore them to sleep in and keep warm..haaa see I do have a sense of humor...at times.*s and I do believe in your signature, very much Maureen Serenading one...well it is ALL a bad dream, and MORE..but I can either live or die..and only one option works for me Thanks *s hugsss Noah... all expressions are from my heart... thank you again *s hugsss and Keep smiling. Victoria... yes that pounding woke me up and that phantom voice dragged me down to this thing to get it out of my system *s thanks ~V..you are greatly appreciated. huggsss Magnus...many hidden messages within, sometimes I don't even detect them 'til later on..*s Just teasin' ya thanks for the visit Maureen 1slick_lady ...most things aren't what they seem to me anymore... sad that it took me so long to realize that and to get out of this idealistic, naive, fairytale world I have been living all my life. Thank you for the read, Helen. Karen...I never hope for anything, never have, never will, I always BELIEVED until lies destroyed it. I can live with hurt, would rather live with truth... Thank you for your time and friendship. hugss Bill...you light up a smile in me, just by being you. Thanks, Always Maureen "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." (J.Garland) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-21-2002 07:24 AM).] |
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