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Woman Of My Dreams (For Joanna)
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Woman Of My Dreams (For Joanna) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(Dedicated to the love of my dreams) Woman Of My Dreams By: Noah Eaton 1/18/02 I dream of holding you Down on the milky eiderdown clouds Of our sweet moonlight dreams Lathering you in the satiny lotion of starlight Wrap me in your velvet Embrace me in your cashmere kiss Dance with me among the curried heavens Swimming among these eternal lovers tides We are ivory swans, flying in mutual harmony Embracing the kaleidoscope heart of paradise Dancing romantic ballet, finding grace in gravity Finding happiness in your angelic heart Hold my hand, sweet love You are the woman of my dreams Kiss me under these roman candle skies Shouting off fireworks of our felicity United in true love… You and me... Forever... [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-18-2002 10:31 PM).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey Noah, m'man  It's been a while since I replied to you, but then again, it's been a while since I replied to anyone really. Time is pressing these days.In any case, here's how I felt about your poem... The first stanza, a very nice introduction to the rest of the poem. A lot of imagery, a lot of reference to the person you are addressing... phrases like "lathering you" all instill feelings in the reader, that's good... and I'm sure it's very effective for the girl you intend this for...  You transist into a different purpose for the next stanza, which is good organization. In this stanza, the shift from "you" to "me" sets the scene, lights the candles and pulls out the chairs... the first two stanzas together are a perfect introduction to romantic poetry, I admire the form that you use. In the third, you persist with the shifts and link the two. Once more that was absolutely perfect...! I can't praise you enough on how you formed this... sorry but every time I see organized poetry I feel giddy...  Throughout the poem you have a lot of sensory appeal, words like "ivory" and "milky" give both coloured and textured qualities to your images. Especially the word "fireworks," which once more attacks several senses at once in the reader's mind. What a talent for imagery you have...! And the ellipse at the end, crowning the word "forever" and complimenting it by never truly ending the poem, but trailing away from it. Fascinating concept here. Noah, this has got to be one of the best poems I've read from you... without a doubt. You've made me glad to once more be walking the blue pages. ~Allan The time for books is over. Create your own philosophy. ~Rudy Ratzinger [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (01-18-2002 10:48 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - a very lovely poem for your Joanna. It's beyond me how she can resist words like this. btw - I'm thinking of a humorous one as a duet. What say you???? BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh sweet Noah! Joanna is going to love this one! I know I did! Well done! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Noah, If I could find someone half as devoted to me as you are to your sweet Joanna, I'd truly be blessed. Until then I have your sweet friendship. I really love this love poem you have penned here. Dawn |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
NOAH how very lucky she is. I loved this wonderful loving poem, floria |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
*Kiss me under these roman candle skies Wow..loved it dear one..as always..enjoy your words..  ~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Noah~ very warming....thank you for reminding us how love can be... HUGSLauren~ Tomorrow's another day |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* Oh Noah...the romantic in you shines brilliantly with this poem. What a wonderful dedication to the Woman Of Your Dreams...***big hugs*** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Noahhhh this is too beautiful for words! my fav stanza was.. "I dream of holding you Down on the milky eiderdown clouds Of our sweet moonlight dreams Lathering you in the satiny lotion of starlight" Your imagery just blows my mind, its so perfect. Thank you for this hunny Hugs and Kisses Joanna |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
Talk about a mindblowing piece of work! This poem was absolutely romantic. The imagery was beautiful. Your words are beautiful. Poetry is spiritual ventilation! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
you are sooooo lovely romantic. Truly a delight to read. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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DayDreamer99 Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 72 |
You are soo romantic and sweet Joanna is a very lucky girl to have captured your heart *muah* byes! Loving the poem! i dont know the words to describe it! Tifferz |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
As always your words are beautiful. Good job Noah! Her throat in tunes expresseth what grief her breast oppresseth. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Noah Such a beautiful dedication to your lady love. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Noah...can't say I have not noticed that you are in love...That would be an understatement of high order... Beautiful poem for a beautiful lady... |
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