Open Poetry #18 |
The Nature of Man |
Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
So long the hurting and the hating Hurried, hissing,... worried, whimpering Always wishing, always waiting for the beast to show his face All the panting, all the pining Praying,... preying, before the shining beast starts slaying all night long He will dance and sing and prance Alive and strong To the cadence of the song, his song Now's his chance to dance till dawn. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is a clever write of rhyme and word play...lots to see here...internal rhyme, alliterations,imagery, turn of phrase...I like the use vocabulary and homophones. impressive work ...very well done jm It's not like you to say sorry |
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HEG Junior Member
since 2002-01-18
Posts 42 |
Very well written! Very entertaining and clever read. Cheers! Harry |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Clever poem, indeed! It is too bad that man strayed from God! It's more fun to love. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Excellent write. I await more from you Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) I agree with Newell too; it is a shame to see man evolve away from the embodiment of Him and how in result we have struggled to establish harmony as a whole! (big hugggssssss) So very well-expressed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bonnie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
Thank you all for your supportive replies! I appreciate it! I am ever exploring different forms of poetry, I love every twist and turn of the written word. This one was fun to write even though it has a heavy meaning. ;o) Thanks again! Love, Bonnie |
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