Open Poetry #18 |
confetti wishes |
dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
my dreams lay still at the foot of you each moment finds you further than the last you step into my heart and pitch confetti 'round then say goodnite before it falls my dreams interrupted by silence i heard only the door closing and i opened my eyes to find the reality you left behind bits of paper on the floor picking them up i scribble upon each one one word at a time then i lay them out together at your feet these, my dreams confetti wishes one day, maybe one day they will fall into our hands -dgvarner 12-21-00 ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love it!!! (smiles) May you forever find true happiness with the love of your life and may you together scoop up this confetti and shower the beauty of these dreams upon you and him forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is sooooo beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
dg, it sounds like someone is toying with your heart, and acting as if its just a Mardi Gras party! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, this had a sorrowful feel to it. Loved the metaphor "confetti wishes" and I immediately thought of something precious, meant to be celebrated but sadly wasted. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is simply lovely. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, I love the way you’ve written this. A dream should not have to be reduced to a confetti wish...sadly though, they too often are. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
This is a sadly beautiful read. I hope he helps you gather up your dreams. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"one day, maybe one day they will fall into our hands" ...MIDNITE, KATHLEEN, TRACEY.. ok, yeah..i guess it does have a sad feel about it...come to think of it, when i wrote it i was feeling a bit blue... but when reading it again, i was dwelling more on the end lines so...i'll post a happy repost next time...LOL thanks for reading! MISTLETOE..you followed me! you picked out the part i was trying to convey this time around! thanks CHRIS.. thank you! ALAN..thanks! i think he will..we will.. hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ [he] comes to me when i'm feelin' down..inspires me without a sound..[he] touches me... -b joel [This message has been edited by dgvarner (01-18-2002 07:23 AM).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Hi sweets, reading this I see it can go both ways. If you read the poem in a positive note in every sense. It is very hopeful about the sprinkling of love and wishes into ones heart. I guess this is tempered by the reality message.... don't ya just hate reality. I will go with the positive message, its what I need. Parker |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PARKER..yes..i see this one being read in both ways too.. i guess we pick out what we need in poetry .. when we need it .. hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DG~ Oh my friend ... *sigh* I loved this the first read ... and now it speaks to me again~ Thank you so much for sharing from your sweet beautiful heart~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I'm with Marge! This one speaks, loudly! Take care! It's okay to shoot the moon ~ John Sebastian |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
MARGIE & EAGLE..thank you my friends i'm glad you can like it twice..lol hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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