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Frost at Midnight
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Frost at Midnight |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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~Rambling On~ And you held Your hands out I watched as you Stood on the curb Cigarette held To enlightened lips Between your fingers, Wisdom spilling from your Palms It was all you had Maybe not You might have laughed Thrown your head back But heaven paused, I stood next to you, And could hear songs From a haunted past Reveal pictures of light, Spiral blue in contrast I’ve often wondered If black was the feeling You might own? And if, would it describe The inner child, your being? Does it move inside you? Each day, like the last? All of midnight Sweeping over the cool black And the frost Lays heavy On wings of steel Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-17-2002 07:30 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! Very deep and poignant sentiments, sweet friend, such mysterious beauty and cadence fill your words! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is so wonderful! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh my this is so nice green eyes. I love the last few lines. floria |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~Every thing you pen is as though each and every word was pondered over and chosen specifically for one particular position in your piece.....your writing is exquisite! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Greeneyes...I have to echo Nancy's thoughts. You certainly convey a great degree of thought in each line...well written... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - your poetry is excellent. I enjoy every write of yours... BC |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Beautiful work, Greeneyes... This poem seems, not so much written....as carved out of a precious material. Each word, carries it's own weight.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Greeneyes - this is beckons me to read it again...and again. Well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Incredible write, Lauren. Your words always flow with thoughtful emotion. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This read like a story with expectancy. I like that in a piece and I understood it too! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, I like your rambling. I agree with Nancy...this piece is exquisite indeed. Very, very well done If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you flow very well with this one. . . it's got a lot of feeling. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I have seen this side of midnight, you described it well. Your rambles are consistantly drawing, pulling me to depths I enjoy. Thank you for sharing yet another jewel of your thoughts. |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
your ability to make people feel what you're feeling when you write is truly astonishing. Bravo! -Dave |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And you held Your hands out I watched as you Stood on the curb Cigarette held To enlightened lips Between your fingers, Wisdom spilling from your Palms It was all you had Maybe not You might have laughed Thrown your head back But heaven paused, I stood next to you, And could hear songs From a haunted past Reveal pictures of light, Spiral blue in contrast I've often wondered If black was the feeling You might own? And if, would it describe The inner child, your being? Does it move inside you? Each day, like the last? ========================================= Have we shared the same stars ...walked the same roads...cried the same tears.... every time you write a piece of me ... and it takes me back...takes my breath... then I remember...you too heard the whispers and cries of a butterfly.  |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This is a very awesome poem. I just have nothing else to say. Great job. Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren if I just said wonderful would it be enough. You know LC, you know, just how much I love your words hon...Hugs to you. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Greeneyes, A gem a veritable emerald of passion. Loved it! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Noah~ Thank you for your vibrant replies ~~ Floria~ I appreciate you stopping by...thank you.. ~~ Nancy~ I so enjoy your thoughts, they always leave me with a smile...HUGS ~~ Magnus~ Thank you for your comments.... ~~ Bill~ As i enjoy yours, thanks much.. ~~ Madame Chipmunk~ As does your reply, appreciate that much...hugs... ~~ Nightshade~ For your words, I thank you.... ~~ Midnitesun~ I so enjoy your words, they are very lifting...hugs... ~~ Irish Rose~ Thank you, for always replying as you do....hugs... ~~ Tracey~ thank you for reading my ramble...hugs ~~ Lauren~ ***** Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-18-2002 11:01 AM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sven~ You always have the right words, I aprreciate that...hugs ~~ Craig~ Oh the long nights on this side of midnight, there's an understanding there, I know you know...I appreciate you...hugs... ~~ Dave~ Thank you for your feelings....I always appreciate your comments... ~~ Janet Marie~ Yes I believe we have...same feelings and roads...tears, and stars...and I hear the whispers all the time...  ~~ Xeonox~ I appreciate your thoughts, thank you much.... ~~ Donna~ You do indeed have a gentle spirit, and with every words it shows..HUGS.. my friend...~~ Kethry~ Thank you, from these gems of green...hugs to you... ~~~~~ Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-18-2002 11:11 AM).] |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
i can't bear it, i just have to bump this. so, here goes..... *takes a deep breath* BUMP!!!!! whew! hehehehehe. -Dave |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Dave~ I've never been bumped before...  thank you...Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day |
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