Open Poetry #17 |
Etched In Rhyme |
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Look into my heart, deeply to the whole reflected in your eyes, mirrors of my soul. Allow me to share this warmth, this glow feel this heartbeat so that you might know the depths of this love that I have for you it beats with strength, steady and true. If you look closely, you will see this fire that burns inside of me. This kiss, this touch will always be for you, my love, the one that I adore. In each moment shared a rhapsody plays only your love can sweep me away. Together we shall walk the sands of time our tale of love....etched in rhyme. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. ~Me~ (I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 11-26-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* this is so very tender and will with a softness that touches my heart. Absolutely beautiful. You have truly etched your love in rhyme. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'If you look closely, you will see this fire that burns inside of me. This kiss, this touch will always be for you, my love, the one that I adore. In each moment shared a rhapsody plays only your love can sweep me away.' Beautiful write, GS...this is truly quite the romantic poem...I really enjoyed it! Great work! sp And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Gentle Spirit What a wonderful tale of love and romance you have presented. Your words flowed like a beautiful symphony. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this is truly beautiful poetry Kathleen |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I'm sure that you know by now that love poems are my cup of tea This is so soft and beautiful, well written! and, I especially enjoyed the last 2 lines Take care, Melissa "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Together we shall walk the sands of time our tale of love....etched in rhyme." What an absolutely wonderful line. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Together we shall walk the sands of time our tale of love....etched in rhyme. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Beautiful poem....lovely ending. Enjoyed so much! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Oh how lovely the flow of magic and love. The entire poem is really releasing and pure. A very spell casting rhyme ~somy and the last stanza is truly pefection..not an ending! This looks really great on you!! Hugs! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Now if that doesn't strum some heart strings and cause much throbbing in the chest - then whoever it's for just doesn't have any warmth at all. Loved it my friend. jwesley Hmmm...maybe your monicker should be Passionate Spirit vs Gentle Spirit - at least for this write! jimmy |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my ... this is just lovely Gentle Spirit! Beautiful expression to share with a loved one. You've captured the spirit of love wonderfully in this piece! Best wishes, /Kit |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Very very nice Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
a beautiful Rhyme...I hope you find, or have found that etch, be well be safe, peace.... Greeneyes~ I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-26-2001).] |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Gentle Spirit, this is absolutely beautiful. Excellent flow. |
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Dusty Rhodes Junior Member
since 2001-10-14
Posts 27 |
This is really a lovely written poem. Thank you for the enjoyment of reading it |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You "etch" your words very well, Donna. *s ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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misguided angel Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 106Australia |
Gentle Spirit, your words are so beautiful and full of love. Andrea Summon the courage to step out of your familiar rut and suddenly many of those things which held you back will no longer have the power to do so. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
simply stunning ever deep...runs |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Startime, I am glad that this touched your heart, and I thank you for your kind words. Snowpants, I am glad that you enjoyed this. I guess I will always be a romantic at heart. Suetang, I think that the symphony comes from what I hear.....inside. Thanks. Melissa, I believe we both enjoy that same cup of tea very much. Thank you. Midnitesun, I wasn't sure if I was gonna use that line, or if it even made sense.... and then I thought....your a poet at heart....of course it makes sense!! Thanks much. Enchantress, so pleased that you enjoyed. *s* Reg, love in itself is magical. Maybe that's my problem.....I still believe in magic.... and love. Thank somy~ Jimmy, I HOPE the warmth is there. He is an inspiration to me. As for that other lil name......nope......that ones not the one I use in adult, though I imagine it would work well too. *w* Kit, coming from you dear lady, I indeed take that as a compliment in high regard! Thanks so much. Bernie, I am glad you liked it!! Lauren, dear friend, I pray that this time that etch has indeed come full circle, and has indeed listened to his heart.... thanks so much your words mean much to me. May you always know that. Eloise, I thank you kindly for those kind words. Dusty, I am but glad that you found enjoyment in my words. Thanks! Wynter, it was a twist on words, I was hoping it would just come out right. Thanks to you. Andrea, thank you for reading those words. The beauty comes from the love...*s* AWC....thank you......it means much!! Thanks to you all!! Your support means so much to me. Peace to all, Donna On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Etching love in time is almost as good as a back rub! This was a remarkably enjoyable read and on one of my favorite subjects as well. I loved the cadence of the piece and your words were chosen beautifully. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Just wonderful! |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Together we shall walk the sands of time our tale of love....etched in rhyme -------------- Wonderfully romantic....Lovely Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Mark, it is good to see your face around here again. Thank you for the kind words. Back rubs are good,but romance.....ah is even better. Thank you kind sir, your words mean much to me. Walker, so glad you enjoyed! MEM, thanks for the read, and glad that you enjoyed. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
A beautiful etching Donna. I am always drawn to your words and have so little time to read them. This was simply a lovely writing of heart. |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
this is an exquisite write of the heart. thank you. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Beautiful, lyrical rhyme. a song from the heart, much enjoyed. Regards, Olias. |
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