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~lewisone~ Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 91Virginia |
"Your Picture" I was packing my belongings, I was getting a new start at last, Than I opened an old box I had, And there was your photograph... There was your picture, Your picture that brought you back to me, If only by a memory, A reminder of how it use to be, Your picture staring back at me.... With weeping eyes and trembling hands, I held it to my heart, I remembered how it use to be, Before we were torn apart.... No matter how I look at things, There are some facts I cannot change, Although your body is gone from me, I'll always have our sweet memories, In your picture.... With weeping eyes and trembling hands, I put your picture in the box again, I closed the lid, as if shutting a door, Your picture I would have forever more.... ©Sharon E. Lewis July 29,1996 |
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misguided angel Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 106Australia |
lewisone, this is such a tender sweet moment. You have painted the picture so well. Andrea Summon the courage to step out of your familiar rut and suddenly many of those things which held you back will no longer have the power to do so. |
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Doug Pretorius Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 81Ontario, Canada |
I felt quite sad reading this poem. Like longing for a lost love or friend. As far as suggestions ... it's hard to say you should do this; or you shouldn't do that. Our writing is all so unique and special to each one of us. All I suggest is to keep on writing and experiment as much as you can with style and content. Practice really does make perfect even with writing. Doug |
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~lewisone~ Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 91Virginia |
Thank you for your replies.... Doug, I agree that each poet has a unique style ....Thank you for the tips....  ~lewisone~ |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Pictures do so much for us.Nice write. Peaches |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Enjoyed this tender write very much. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I have many photos, that when I move on .I wonder what one does with them all...very soft and moving words ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This touched something in me. I have a particular photo album, that has pictures of a great love I once had. Every so often, I will pull out that album, bring back the memories, have a sad moment to myself for what could have been, then put it back on the shelf. If only the feelings of loss could be put back on the shelf as easily. What's the saying...tis better to have loved and lost.....yes, I think it is. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
With weeping eyes and trembling hands, I put your picture in the box again, I closed the lid, as if shutting a door, Your picture I would have forever more.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Memories can be for a lifetime, so hold on to the good and release the bad. At least thats my motto. I like your poem very much. Deb |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Great writing Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
feeling this today I liked this very much |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
hon, I never critique something so personal, I can't improve on this Kathleen |
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~lewisone~ Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 91Virginia |
Hi All! Been gone all week and just returned home and wanted to thank you each for the lovely comments on my poem....This poem is very close to my heart and I'm so happy I could endear yours. Thanks so much! ~lewisone~ |
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