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The Love Box
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The Love Box |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I found the box just yesterday in the attic in a corner nook I stood there, hands to my cheeks wondering if I should even look I knelt upon the dusty floor put my hands upon the lid gathering strength for memories that till now, I thought I’d hid My eyes were tightly shut against the flood of tears gathered there painful pangs knocked at my heart I wanted to look but did not dare I knew what lay inside the box you were there in every token seeing them now would only bring back every lie that was ever spoken |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh this is wonderful! A box of memories...tokens of a lost love. How sad, but, so breautifully written. ~Enjoyed, hugs, Nancy~ ~Life may not be the song you requested, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
As always, you express yourself so well, and, I do relate! Melissa  "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Sharon can I relate to this poem, and felt every pang of pain. Excellent writing, and I am sure there are many hanging onto painful memories and the box does not necessary have to be cardboard, as compartmentalizing pain in neat boxes in one's mind is just as painful and hard to get rid of, so I took your poem both ways. Can you tell I liked this one a lot? ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sounds like you should have put him in the box instead of the trinkets!  |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
our minds so cleverly hide hurt held deeply inside yet tokens from the past may painfully recast scenes once begotten we thought we'd forgotten |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Poet DeVine - as always, a most telling writing. The Love Box, but dare I look. This did touch me... BC |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for you kind comments. I'm cleaning and throwing out a lot of stuff. This poem reminded me that saving stuff from a hurtful relationship is not a good plan! So out with it!  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A vivid description of a moment in time that many can relate to I'm sure Sharon. Sometimes we save things that were best long forgotten. Then again, sometimes reviewing and making the decision to throw out those tokens, can be almost a cleansing feeling many years later. A very contemplative write, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I dont see anything wrong with keeping momento's of past relationships, its when you put them on a database and start to cross reference the problems start. Very touching write I enjoyed. Regards, Olias. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* You express the feeling very well that memories can still hold the pain from lost love. My heart felt your tears for I too have memories though they are only in my mind now. *hugs* Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sharon I don't usually do this, but I have to refer you to my poem so similar in nature,just from the perspective of making the box. /pip/Forum51/HTML/002301.html I love this, and it is so true. My box is in my closet, and it is so hard to keep closed. Memories can be so tough,I could almost want a lobotomy sometimes... Sandra [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 11-23-2001).] |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
This seems awfully painful... |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Great write, I see you've read the text (written it in this case) but is the lesson learned ? I hope so. No one ever listened themselves into trouble. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon- I like this one lots, and can certainly relate to hanging onto some of that painful 'stuff'. Good for you, for saying, 'out with it!' Excellent write, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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