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Sven
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0 posted 2001-11-19 09:50 PM


tonight,
I just
need you
to
be
for me

be who
you are
and who
you were

be who
I love
and who
I need

be you
and be
no one
else

be my
love
and
be my
life

tonight,
just for
me,

be

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Magnus
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1 posted 2001-11-19 09:55 PM


Wanting to just be...a simple but common
request in a hunger for one loved...I liked
this...

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2 posted 2001-11-19 10:04 PM


Oh Sven....this just sings to me!  "Be my love...."  Oops sorry, I kind of got carried away for a minute.  This is one of those 'ohmyhowyoumakemesigh' ones.  
Just perfect!
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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3 posted 2001-11-19 10:09 PM


~A 'hearty' request here. Lovely Sven. *Peace.
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4 posted 2001-11-19 10:56 PM


Sven,

    I reallyyy like this one. Simple.. but it says so much.. reveals so much feeling... *sighs* just beautiful.  This one is going into my library.

Hugs
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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5 posted 2001-11-19 11:18 PM


Ah, if only we could get what we need, simply by asking.
Well done.
Sandra

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6 posted 2001-11-19 11:47 PM


A simply complicated request requested wonderfully by your work, Sven Pen. I love this.  

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

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7 posted 2001-11-20 12:14 PM


I will be

all that you

ask of me

easily

for

I am...



Beautiful words, Sven...
~Tier
11/01

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8 posted 2001-11-20 05:44 AM


Thinking of phrases now...I think therefore I am, and You can only be who you are...James
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9 posted 2001-11-20 06:58 AM


A lovely and tender request Sven ... beautifully and gently stated. Much enjoyed your romantic thoughts and flow in this.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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10 posted 2001-11-20 08:51 AM



The
simplest
request

to be

for one

thank you...

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11 posted 2001-11-20 08:54 AM


~sigh~  this is poetry, in truth....wonderful Sven....  


Greeneyes~


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because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
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[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-20-2001).]

Charisma
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12 posted 2001-11-20 08:58 AM


it's always a treat to read your poetry, and this one is no exception. Love it very much.



Charisma ~TMP~

[This message has been edited by Charisma (edited 11-20-2001).]

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13 posted 2001-11-20 09:04 AM


Sven,
You certainly know how to put the BE on someone. Enjoyed

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14 posted 2001-11-20 11:47 AM


....be my wife?

sorry, couldn't resist, it's the rhymer romantic in me    

this is beautiful

Kathleen
(Kay)

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15 posted 2001-11-20 11:57 AM


your explorations on forms, and your ways of expressing your thoughts are wonderful, O Sir Sven...

Regards,
sudhir

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16 posted 2001-11-20 02:50 PM




Oh....to just simply "be"

Could that totally "Be"?

I guess at times, it could be a mystery...


Wonderful Sven and reaches right to the heart..

Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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17 posted 2001-11-20 07:09 PM


Ahhh, to be or not to be!!!

Cor

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18 posted 2001-11-20 07:18 PM


What ever else I may be,
I am a piece of poetry.

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19 posted 2001-11-20 07:28 PM


John,

I love this poem.  but if all i us could just "be" this world would be a better place.  

~Laura~

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20 posted 2001-11-20 09:43 PM


Very simple and honest request. It is a poem that just falls into place. No frills just be. Yes, I love this. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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21 posted 2001-11-20 09:50 PM


wow. . .

Magnus, thank you Sir. . . that's me. . .simple. . .

Nancy, it is??  Well, thank you so much, glad that you enjoyed. . .

SpitFire, as always. . . thank you. . . peace. . .  

Tara, thank you my friend. . . it's an honor to be in your library. . .

Sandra, who says that we can't??  Maybe, if we ask long enough, we'll be heard. . . thank you as always. . .

Temptress, "simply complicated". . . that's it exactly. . . thank you. . .  

Tier, beautiful words from you my friend. . . thank you. . .

James, that's right. . . we can only be who we are. . . thank you. . .

Kit, thanks. . . always nice to hear from you. . .

Sunshine, you're welcome my friend. . . and thank you. . .

Lauren, thank you. . . it's all that I have. . .

Charisma, it's always a treat to read your responses my friend. . . thank you. . .

Sy, thanks. . . I've been told I'm pretty good at it. . .

Kathleen, thank you. . . please feel free to rhyme anytime. . .

Sudhir my friend, thank you. . . I do try, always good when people notice. . .

Enchanted Melody, it could be. . . you never know. . . thank you my friend. . .  

Cor, that is the question!  Thank you. . .

Midnitesun, that we are. . . and so much more. . . thank you. . .

Laura, indeed it would be my friend. . . thank you. . .

Startime, thank you. . . yes, simple as always. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (edited 11-20-2001).]

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22 posted 2001-11-21 07:25 PM


It's a request I have often had in my heart, but never been able to put into words....
You touched souls with this one dear Sven...
What else can I do but  *sigh*  ?

Isis

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23 posted 2001-11-21 07:30 PM


So romantic, it's not to much to asked is it? To just be. Great poem.
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24 posted 2001-11-22 05:44 PM


loved it,my friend
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25 posted 2001-11-22 06:22 PM


Be well poet sir, I enjoyed the write.

Regards,
Olias.

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26 posted 2001-11-22 07:17 PM


Dearest Sven...how could anyone be anything different with you? They would be crazy not to.  

Sincerely,
Regina

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27 posted 2001-11-22 08:16 PM


I'm so glad you are who you are, so that we can read your heart
THis is so lovely
Liz

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28 posted 2001-11-22 09:01 PM


Isis, perhaps then, my friend, I was able to help you. . . and thank you for that *sigh*

walker, you wouldn't think so. . . but, then again. . . thank you. . .

vandana, always good to see you my friend. . .  

Olias, I shall be my friend, as I hope that you will be. . . thank you. . .

Regina, I would hope that you would be right. . . thank you. . .

Liz, that's all that I can be. . . thank you dear Lady. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (edited 11-22-2001).]

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29 posted 2001-11-23 01:28 AM


Sven - excellent my friend, as you always do...

BC

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30 posted 2001-11-23 03:03 AM


SvenSweetie, this is magnificent...
So delicately woven expression of heart I so much enjoyed this read PoetFriend...

HugsNSmiles2u
*~coco~*

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31 posted 2001-12-18 01:31 AM


Sven,

i am glad that i popped in the back pages for a peep..

i am sceptical..is it possible for me to be my 100% undiluted real self? but of course, we should all try to attain this worthy goal "BE"

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32 posted 2001-12-18 07:22 PM


How did I almost miss this fantastic piece?
The way you wrote this is masterful to say the least.
Yet, only what one comes to expect from the GR8 Voice of the Northlands

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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33 posted 2001-12-18 07:25 PM


The best we can do when we with a loved one, is to be ourselves.  A great poem and a pleasure to read.  Thank you for sharing

     Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

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34 posted 2001-12-18 07:26 PM


The best we can do when we with a loved one, is to be ourselves.  A great poem and a pleasure to read.  Thank you for sharing

     Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

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35 posted 2001-12-18 07:35 PM


Sven, this is beautiful as everything you post! Your heart always come through every piece you write. I so loved this.

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

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36 posted 2001-12-18 07:51 PM


(smiles) Oh John, this is sooooooo lovely! (sigh) May you forever be with her and be happy for all eternity! (big hugggsssss) You always write so beautifully, sweet friend, I don't know how I could miss this timeless classic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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37 posted 2001-12-18 11:01 PM


BC, thank you my friend. . .

PoetFriend Coco, thank u as always. . . it's always good to see you. . .

faterider, thanks for taking a trip back into the stacks. . . I don't know if this is possible for all of us. . . but, we can try. . . thank you. . .

Interloper, well, I still have a long way to go to reach where you are, oh Great Voice of the Southland. . . thanks. . .

Hypnosis, thank you. . . yes, it is the best that we can do. . .

Saunni, thank you my friend. . . so good to see you back. . .

Noah, thank you. . . glad that you enjoyed it. . . as always. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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38 posted 2001-12-18 11:13 PM


Wonderful Sven.I can relate to this very much. Sometimes we need nothing more than for someone to be..be there..be ours...just be. Love it Sven.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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39 posted 2001-12-18 11:33 PM


Oh, if it were only as simple and plain as your request!  (simple and plain is good)
I like this one.
    

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it."     Wendell Berry


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40 posted 2001-12-19 12:12 PM


What a sweet piece you've written here, dear Sven!  I positively love it!
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41 posted 2001-12-19 12:27 PM


Sven - I have known your longing. The best to you, as always...

BC

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42 posted 2001-12-19 05:30 AM


being you and seeing me
how can this not ever be
seeing you and being me
joined thoughout eternity
be well
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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43 posted 2001-12-19 05:03 PM


should
I not
be me
if
tomorrow
comes...?
          

...great write, Sven...liked it...



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