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Without Warmth
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Without Warmth |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I brushed against your dreams In the words you shared And was dusted with them Just as if on a cold day I had passed beneath the limbs Pine green and powder There was beauty In each refraction of light That floated to settle Leaving a chill when it touched Bared places I could not cover Rain bowed reflections Danced as phrases hung suspended And touched my lips in settle Of light sequence, Melting one by one Absorbed slowly with each dart of tongue To feed a fire for more Now, Laden with thoughts and fuel I find no hearth to lie No match to strike Left with Foxfire Dreams Of my own |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This is more than lovely. This is to be kept for whenever one doubts one's self, to believe again, in magic... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you for the vivid imagery which always inspires me to find my own ways to express in my writings. Good to read you again, Ron. -MVS "If you don't ask: you don't get." -Steve Miller |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN???? I missed you! sigh....and this is why.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I brushed against your dreams In the words you shared And was dusted with them =============================== There was beauty In each refraction of light That floated to settle Leaving a chill when it touched Bared places I could not cover Rain bowed reflections Danced as phrases hung suspended And touched my lips in settle Of light sequence, Melting one by one Absorbed slowly with each dart of tongue To feed a fire for more =================================== There is MUCH warmth found here in these words.... This is so lovely... superb employ of imagery and poetic anology to define the emotions... your gift of imagery and soft spoken phrases always impress poet sir. This offering proves my words true. jm ~~~~~~ Thank you for the gracious reply on my last post. Your kindness is appreciated  I would wait till the end of time for you, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, so good to see your poems again. This is a very strong one, and I do understand it well. Sandra |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lady: Your kind words are greatly appreciated. If this in any way helps one to believe in themselves or magic... then I am honored. Mark: Good to see you are also around. Been much too busy to spend the time here I would like, and have missed reading your words as well as those of all here. Thanks for such a gracious reply. Serenity... Where have I been? Code and project he!! ( chuckling) Thanks for your nice words. JM: Dear Poetess... you flatter me with your kindness and with your reply. Thank you sincerely for sharing them with me. Catalina: Thank you for the nice words... hope to be around more soon depending on the work load and deadlines imposed by work. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 11-19-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely words you placed upon the paper...James |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
This is so beautiful Ron.... I find the following lines particularly sooo lovely.... "I brushed against your dreams In the words you shared And was dusted with them" Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Carol Lina Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 94USA |
May I sleep with this verse under my pillow I can't pick a favorite line! Wow is all I can muster here, very delicate and romantic....softCarolina |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Capt---This is exquisite! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Capt...Breathtaking!! I have now read it at least six times and I am still speechless. I am in awe!! This is a keeper for which I thank you sir. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* wow you are one of those incredibly romantic writers whose work I cannot get enough of. More please. This one gave me a dream I will sleep on. Thank you so much. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Simply beautiful, Ron. All writing comes |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
The Master does it again! lovely, dear Captain... ~Tier |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I admire your words and aspire to your talent. I think you should quit your day job and do this instead. Buy a lottery ticket, ya never know. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is magnificent, my friend... Ron, My regards, sudhir |
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Abigaile Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 112San Mateo, CA |
Very beautiful. *SMILE* I really loved this. "I am nae poet, in a sense; |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I brushed against your dreams In the words you shared And was dusted with them Just as if on a cold day I had passed beneath the limbs Pine green and powder" This beginning alone is a keeper, but the more I read, the more I knew another one would be safely nestled into my Favorites. Stunningly beautiful imagery, Ron. |
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