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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2001-12-31 07:08 PM

Ok...this is different...I know that...Just
giving it a shot... I saw the birds soaring
today and got inspired to write this..

See the birds circling, soaring high
Watching the carrion with an eye.
Waiting for the prey to become still.
Circling, circling, watching until.

Until the birds are past the meal
the carcass they no longer steal
Turkey buzzards circling up high
watching with a death given eye.

There they are, them and the rest
waiting to swallow and digest.
Circling, soaring up in the sky
a black coal of death for an eye.

Ashes to ashes, dust to dust
Turkey buzzard about to bust.
Picking the bones till all clean
dirty feathers with black sheen.

Just remember the soaring bird
silently flying, circling unheard.
Turkey buzzards flying so high...
a black coal of death for an eye.

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

1 posted 2001-12-31 07:15 PM

Diversity is a good thing.I like this, I could just see those big black birds flying. floria

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-12-31 07:37 PM

Magnus~
I enjoy the versatility of your writing~
If it wings it's way to your inkwell ... pen it~
Nicely done~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

3 posted 2001-12-31 07:47 PM

Magnus, I love the rawness and primitiveness of this poem....
Very beautifully written, but please don't invite me over to your house for turkey buzzard dinner.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2001-12-31 08:42 PM

(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...I love the versatile and original feel of your work, sweet friend, you describe the birds so powerfully here! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, keep those wonderful words coming into the New Year! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2001-12-31 08:58 PM

Magnus--There's a place for all creatures..a purpose for every louse, but can you tell me why termites are eating this house?

Sorry, I enjoyed your poem...and this just leaped out of my fingers onto the keyboard...must be the time of year. Happy New Year to you!

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

6 posted 2001-12-31 10:54 PM

*gosh* did you ever bring this vision to life....really different and really good. I enjoyed this much. **big hugs**

HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mac Attack
Member

since 2001-12-12

Posts 100
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2002-01-01 11:19 AM

I really enjoyed this; I liked how you were able to look past the beauty of flight to the dark side of the hunter beneath.

I have often wondered why we think birds in flight are so breathtaking, yet flying insects are loathsome. Aside from size, there is very little difference, and your post reminds me of that.

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