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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-12-31 12:49 PM

out
in the distance
hidden from
my view
a fireplace
is burning
familiar
smell of you

I had
tear washed you
out of
my mind
but here again
you sneak
in a crack
I didn’t find

it all came back
to me
the way
that I had felt
how you
had touched me
the way
I let my walls
melt

smoke is
a haunting melody
a sad song
of pain
I had almost
forgotten it
now
a new refrain

I let the smoke
surround me
osmosis to my soul
but just as
that white smoke
you were
impossible
to hold

once again
I brush away
my tears
balancing myself
back on my feet
singing the unfinished
song of my life
a melody I’ve yet
to complete

"I have already paid for all my future sins." Sade...(King of Sorrow)

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

1 posted 2001-12-31 01:07 PM

"I let the smoke
surround me
osmosis to my soul
but just as
that white smoke
you were
impossible
to hold"

That was my favorite part. This was very much enjoyable to read.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

2 posted 2001-12-31 01:23 PM

1slick_lady - sadness embraces, but your warm and tender heart will prevail. A very beautiful sad writing, as you do...

BC

~lewisone~
Member

since 2001-11-23

Posts 91
Virginia

3 posted 2001-12-31 01:25 PM

A very enjoyable read indeed.....Beautiful
expressions of a broken heart....Been there
and this sums it up so well.....Very nice work!

~lewisone~

Hypnosis
Member

since 2001-12-02

Posts 325
CO

4 posted 2001-12-31 02:17 PM

This is some great writing, which contains vivid imagery! I love it! Great Job!

Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

seraphin
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1004
Michigan

5 posted 2001-12-31 02:36 PM

Lovely.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2001-12-31 02:55 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Helen, I can feel such sorrow behind these words, but also a beacon of hope and perserverance! (sigh) Love will always find a way, sweet friend, and you will find that melody that will fill your life with sheer joy! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet Helen! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2001-12-31 03:07 PM

once again
I brush away
my tears
balancing myself
back on my feet
singing the unfinished
song of my life
a melody I’ve yet
to complete
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
So sad but hauntingly lyrical.
Much enjoyed Helen.
~Hugs and Happy New Year, Nancy~

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

8 posted 2002-01-01 10:50 AM

beautiful.....

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