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Kit McCallum
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0 posted 2001-12-31 07:26 AM


I couldn't resist posting a response to Balladeer's incredibly moving poem,
entitled "Dear Honey-Poet DeVine's Challenge" …
Thank you for the inspiration sweet poet, you are amazing.  
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My Darling …

My darling, it has been a while,
I miss you very much,
I miss the tenderness we shared,
I miss your loving touch.

I'm sorry that I walked away,
However, now I know,
That I should not have left your side …
It seems so long ago.

I searched and searched to no avail,
My quest has been in vain;
A hollow journey on my own,
With emptiness and pain.

I wished so many times that I
Could wander back to you,
But each day, it grew harder
To apologize a'new.

The distance seemed to widen,
As the days grew dark and long,
The time that passed just seemed to
Make it worse, to right my wrong.

I'm sorry for the hurt I've caused,
My guilt has been immense ...
I'd wish for your forgiveness,
But I have no good defense.

I'd ask you for a second chance,
But know I can't un-do,
The pain and anguish I have caused,
To both the boys and you.

So I will place this letter
In the box beside my bed,
Along with all the others,
Tucked away to you … un-read.

/Kit McCallum

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (12-31-2001 07:59 AM).]

© Copyright 2001 Kit McCallum - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-12-31 07:35 AM


Oh Kit. This is perfect!! A perfect reply to Michael's poem. Into my library.
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2 posted 2001-12-31 07:57 AM


I love this, Kit. This is a perfect response to Balladeer's poem.
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3 posted 2001-12-31 08:54 AM


Marvelous!
Kethry
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4 posted 2001-12-31 09:14 AM


Kit,
I can see why you and Deer write so well in tandem. you have such complementary styles and thoughts. Beautifully done!
Kethry

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5 posted 2001-12-31 11:18 AM


Kit, this is a wonderful response to Balladeers poem. You picked up the theme and emotion in his poem, and responded perfectly. What a sad love story each of these poems tell. If they were true, I’m sure I’d be crying. Thankfully they’re only fiction.

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6 posted 2001-12-31 11:23 AM



Kit, a most perfect response...now hopefully, someone will take the letters, affix a stamp, and mail them...

Just perfect!

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7 posted 2001-12-31 11:28 AM


Kit, this is a perfect reply to Balladeer's poem....both touch the heart...
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8 posted 2001-12-31 11:38 AM


Kit,

     I have to agree with everyone... This si the perfect response.. Well done


Hugs,
Tara

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9 posted 2001-12-31 01:12 PM


Kit
I am in total agreement with the others.  Nicely done.  Unfortunately, there are many out there who have felt the same feelings that you have penned.

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10 posted 2001-12-31 01:53 PM


Kit - you do tell it like it is. And to put the letter away, not to be read. Wow, what heart telling words...

BC

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11 posted 2001-12-31 01:55 PM


Ditto and so "Kit"!  But...there better be a third party somewhere to get these two back together or I will be on kleenix alert until 2003! Happy New Year Kit!

~*~ Happy New Year ~*~
~* Carpe' Diem *~

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12 posted 2001-12-31 01:56 PM




(smiles) Oh Kit, I am so happy that this isn't related on a personal experience too, or I would be flooding with tears. (sigh) This is soooooooo beautiful, sweet Kit, your words are always so lovely! We all love you so much, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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13 posted 2001-12-31 01:59 PM


Kit this is wonderful!  
And, the letters should both be mailed immediately!  
Oh, sorry I do get so carried away at times.
*Happy New Year to you and yours*

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

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14 posted 2001-12-31 03:53 PM


Ah, dear Kit...you know me like a book! You know that if you respond to mine then I am certainly going to respond to your response becasue I'm a responsible guy! On my way....

You did a beautiful job with this, m'lady. You picked up the exact feeling and sentiment that I had in mine..we're not brother and sister, are we? TELL ME NO!!!

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15 posted 2001-12-31 05:40 PM


I see a mini series in rhyme divine coming on here...a poetic ping pong marathon!!
there is NO ONE who could poetic reply to Deers story poems better than you Kit-girlie..
great minds think alike
Happy New Year sweet poetess Kit

Kit McCallum
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16 posted 2001-12-31 06:17 PM


Thank you for all the wonderful comments everyone! These lovely sentiments go to the sweet Balladeer with my many, many thanks for the constant inspiration he brings about in us all. I was in a wee dry spell, and he always has a way to snap me out of it.  

And Michael ... I'm looking forward to your response to my response to your response, to .... lol)  But Michael  ... brother & sister? ACK!  Oh, I hope not 'deer, I hope not!!!   

Much appreciation to all, and Happy New Year!!!  Hey JM ... on Canada's Much Music, they're playing retro boogie 24 hours straight!!! I've got the VCR on record, woohooo!
Hugs to all,
/Kit

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17 posted 2001-12-31 08:50 PM


Kit--wonderful reply letter...and equally touching and human!  Happy New Year!!
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18 posted 2002-01-01 01:40 AM


The distance seemed to widen,
As the days grew dark and long,
The time that passed just seemed to
Make it worse, to right my wrong.

Trying really hard to read these in order.  Love your sequel, Kit...moving on now.

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19 posted 2002-01-02 09:51 PM


Kit,
Dear friend...you do bless my life. Thanks so much and now that I have this collection in my library I'll attempt to join these for a brief time. A shame they are split between 17 & 18.

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20 posted 2002-01-03 10:56 AM


Well, at least degenerating into giggles at Deer's "responsible guy" comment snapped shut my jaw... it was hanging open in awe at your ability to answer his poetry so perfectly. *S* Well done! *S*
Kit McCallum
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21 posted 2002-01-04 06:29 AM


Thank you again for all the wonderful responses to this series. Little did I know writing this one, that we'd continue on for a few more poetic rounds!

Your comments are all so very much appreciated, thank you!

Best wishes and hugs
/Kit

I'm just popping in a link to Larry's thread, where he pulled all 5 links together for us, including the finale, so I can find these down the road myself.  
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