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Sleeping Alone
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Sleeping Alone |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Sleeping alone tonight beneath gentle rain and our special star, I remember how it was to sleep with you. Sometimes a casual nap after making love would find me gathered close in your arms, your mouth soft against my hair, my ear pressed close to your chest. Your heart would beat like distant mountain thunder, its familiar rhthym lulling me to sleep. Rest always came easy then, beneath your arm I felt safe and protected. Often we nestled together like polished spoons in a silver drawer, with your broad chest pressed close to my back. I would curve into you completely, our bodies melding into one. I remember smiling in my sleep every time you claimed my breasts with loving hands. Your earthwarm breath against my ear was all the lullaby I needed. Once in Phoenix we slept back to back - I felt so distant from you. It's true your weary snoring kept me awake, but looking back I know I'd rather spend the night awake within your arms then sleeping outside the circle of your love. That night your back was a wall that separated us as surely as the six beaches that lie between us now. Lying still beneath these stars with only my own breathing to sing me to sleep, I miss you more than my poems can ever say. 12/30/01 |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The longing is felt in every breath of this poem The closeness beatifully expressed The separation, a universal sorrow WEll done Liz |
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craigrk Member
since 2001-12-23
Posts 123 |
If you were not alone there wouldn't be the poem. This is an utterly compelling read, thank you very much. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
The postures of sleep in analogy to the closeness of your love...well done..with love comes loneliness too, unfortunately...but it will pass and there are so many other fish in the sea!  |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Very touching, I could understand what you were feeling while writing this. |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Beki: I know the feeling and sleeping alone is for the pits. Your writing comes from your heart and the reader can feel this in every line. Nicely done. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you all for reading and for your comments. Elizabeth, you are a poet I greatly admire and one I always look for when I visit, so your comment is especially valued (of course I value everyone's comments) Craig, if I were not alone there would not be 75% of my work over the last almost 30 years This poem was written for a man I haven't seen in ober 20 years, during which I was married to someone else (divorced now tho) but real love endures forever and that love has always been my muse - thanks for reading [This message has been edited by Beki (12-31-2001 03:07 PM).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Ecrivan , I have always heard there are other fish in the sea but I haven't found any. SInce I was 16 (30 years) I have measured all other men by this one and found them lacking. But he has given me inspiration for hundreds of beautiful poems for which I am greatful.Hey - does your SN mean writer? I have recently been taking French and the words I have found for writer have not seemed quite right... [This message has been edited by Beki (12-31-2001 03:08 PM).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Opeth and Ariana, I am glad you could relate. Sleeping togeter is one of the most intimate acts we can do and I think anyone who has loved can relate to the closeness it implies.I am glad my poem conveyed that to you both . [This message has been edited by Beki (12-31-2001 02:53 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) You are soooooooo romantic, sweet friend, this had a sad ending but it is such a heavenly feeling to sleep beside true love and be close to the one you love! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may true sweet love forever rest close to your heart! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rebecca, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beki! I love this...I just love it!! Oh I know it is sad and heartwrenching but sooo well done! Very nicely penned poetess. *Hugs and a Happy New Year, Nancy* *~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~* |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
You were truly able to get your feelings across to the reader. great poem . floria |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Hi Beki, I can feel every line of this heartwrenching poem. I'll bet he is feeling the same way sleeping without you! Best Wishes. Happy New Year RP |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is so heartwrenching. I wonder why it is so hard to forget sometimes? Twenty years is a long time  It's good to read you and I hope you'll be around often during the coming year. Happy New Year hon.I am/Kathleen/ |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Tissue anyone? I thought I was done crying.. but after reading this I realize that there is one more thing I have to get used to.. sleeping alone. I very much connected with your pain in this post. ~beth |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed very much...James |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
WOW! I am overwhelmed by the respose to this post. I have not visited Passions for awhile but I never had this many comments on any poem before! Thank you all, most sincerely, for reading and for commenting. I sent him the poem in an email - he said "it is beautiful - both the poem AND the memories of those moments" so I guess maybe he feels the same, when he remembers. But he isn't sleeping alone so I think it is not quite the same for him, though I doubt sleeping with her is the same as sleeping with me  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow, Beki this is an intense poem of remembrance and longing. It is a beautiful description of snuggling with your special man, and such an emotional write of the feelings you have of missing his presence, even after 20 years. Well done, poetess. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Beautiful! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
thanks a bunch for your comments Midnite and amusmi, I appreciate them all |
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