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Fragile, Handle with Care
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Fragile, Handle with Care she collects glass and he his memories objet d'art becomes artillery and if not the object then the verbal is thrown toward she… she quietly wipes away the dust hoping to wipe away the rust but the memories are here to stay in the form of d'art objet he says "I gave you this and that" and she quells the tit for tat he says, "WHAT do you WANT" and she hides from his taunt he leaves the room she gives a sigh and in the sparkle of glass on high she reaches up then spreads the gleam she wipes the crystal to extend the sheen and in the light she cries commitment, honor, promise, bound a grimace at footstep she looks around he stands before her his hand extends she wants to believe his love has no end but he says "what do you want?" and then the truth, his tease and taunt rise like bile within her throat and she slowly, slowly chokes for he won't see the hurt in her for in her love, he is that sure and there is nowhere for her to go…. so she turns back to her glass her crystal and her objet d'art she says, quietly, "it will pass," [this breaking of her heart] then quietly turns to polish the glass. Circa 30 December 2000 Revised 29 December 2001 |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 every single word..... (glad you are home) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
no critiques here ha...bittersweet thoughts enjoyed very much ~Victoria~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
And the beat goes on! Nice writing  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...once again you touch a place inside of me.... *~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
who could ever forget this one, once having read it... "not I" said the moth Its about time the sun shined around here...I was about to call Mother Nature and complain   When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karilea...sadly...too many women live with this hurt and emptiness...just surviving with a few personal things to comfort them.. Have missed your words.. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
a cunning piece of poesie, I took it that the glass would have been thrown, but you kept and polished it, much to my amazement, not giving in to the taunts..well done Sunshine! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--This breaks my heart! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad, Karilea. Very well expressed. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kari, this crystal write is amazing. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Karilea, I just love the way you wove the sadness and the crystal together in this one. So sadly beautiful. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunshine - this is just an amazing write. Just awesome! What a story you have told. The best to you.... BC |
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