Dear Jane, From John...(PoetdeVine's Challenge)

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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2001-12-28 05:08 PM

Your words say our love is over
and can not ever again be.
That there has not been another
and you want to be set free.

You tell me not to write or say
three words you cannot stand.
That if I did I would again lie
which is not a card in my hand.

You say you feel so unsure
if love can ever again be found.
That this love would not endure
and you don’t want me around.

Ever tell a lie to you I won’t.
I can not reassure you more.
And I only pray that you don’t
slam shut and lock your door.

My gut churns with emptiness
for I don’t feel I can eat.
The loneliness from this mess
is felt from my head to my feet.

I want you to know that I can
never love another as I have you.
And that I am a loving man
whose feelings of you are true.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-12-28 05:15 PM

this is just heartbreaking......challenge well met!!

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2001-12-28 05:47 PM

*sniff

Man! It seems sad love letters are the most popular to write. I hope sir that you never have to write one like this. Into my library it goes! Challenge well met!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2001-12-28 05:50 PM

Sue...seems I am on your list today for
replies...I do appreciate each and every
one of them....thanx..

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2001-12-28 05:52 PM

PoetD....I had this happen once in my life..
It is something you never forget...Easy to
write those feelings...Happily, I have not
had that happen with my wife...

Thank you for the challenge...

LadyShadowWalker
Junior Member

since 2001-12-27

Posts 15
Minnesota, USA

5 posted 2001-12-28 05:53 PM

Magnus, I enjoyed reading your work. It was really done well. I can offer no constructive critiques except that I really enjoyed it. :-)

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2001-12-28 05:54 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Barry, this is so heartbreaking but sooooo beautiful, I am happy that this letter isn't related to your own feelings! (sigh) With a loving heart like yours, you are destined to hold true love forever! (smiles) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend, what a perfect sentimental love letter to top the challenge, I need to try it too! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Ariana
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since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

7 posted 2001-12-28 06:30 PM

Mr. "M": Been there, done that and know the feeling in every word that you have written. (And that happened this past year). Keep writing - your words depict emotion, love, hurt and much more. I enjoy reading your work.
A

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2001-12-28 06:56 PM

LadyS...That is enough critique for me...
Thank you...

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2001-12-28 06:57 PM

Noah...thank you very much..

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2001-12-28 06:59 PM

Ariana...very sorry that you have felt these
feelings...thank you for your words...

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

11 posted 2001-12-28 07:04 PM

Barry....nice work...Nancy.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2001-12-28 07:15 PM

Thank You Nancy...Hope your New Year is
a positive one for your family...

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

13 posted 2001-12-28 10:19 PM

Barry,

Another wonderful write

It's hard to stay away from here isn't it? lol I enjoyed

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

14 posted 2001-12-28 10:29 PM

Dear John,
I'm sorry
I have hurt you
I now see it
so clear
is it too late
to still love me
Do you?
Do you dear?
From Jane

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

15 posted 2001-12-28 10:47 PM

*sigh* so very sad.....I hope you never have to receive a letter that would cause such pain. You broke my heart with this poem, Barry....**hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

16 posted 2001-12-28 11:41 PM

I've always wondered why we have to have this happen in our lives. . . but. . . it's a part of life isn't it???

well done Sir. . . you bring the feelings well. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

17 posted 2001-12-28 11:58 PM

Please pass the tissues, Magnus...
I am sniffling all over my keyboard.
I loved the sad ache of your poem.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

18 posted 2001-12-29 12:11 PM

Ah, Magnus, you broke my heart!

Mon Cherie

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since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

19 posted 2001-12-29 09:15 AM

Magnus, I juz hope there is a way for you to rid her of the insecurity she is feeling. And then, I hope it isn't too late. So, I wish you love in the new year.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

20 posted 2001-12-30 08:46 AM

Magnus,
sometimes love isn't enough is it? Sad write.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

21 posted 2001-12-30 10:27 AM

Probably everyone has had a broken heart and has broken someones heart too..i guess we just cant help our mysterious feelings..I would rather be told the truth than to have someone lie to me and say he loved me when he really didnt...enjoyed Magnus..

~Victoria~

Magnus

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Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

22 posted 2001-12-30 02:19 PM

Tara...sorry for the late replies...YEP..sure is..

Magnus

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23 posted 2001-12-30 02:20 PM

1slick_lady, NEVER too late...but the
second time around might be really hard
to recover from...Glad you liked this..

Magnus

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Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

24 posted 2001-12-30 02:22 PM

Karen,  I had that happen as a Teen...I
was devastated...ended up wrecking my mother's
car...Was not a happy camper over that..

I won't ever forget that moment,  though
I am glad I found another lady,  that has
been very good to me for a long time now..

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

25 posted 2001-12-30 02:23 PM

Thanx Sven...yep...such are the trials of
life that we all must endure at some point.

Magnus

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Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

26 posted 2001-12-30 02:24 PM

Madame C...Larry C...

Tissues are on the way...Fedex overnite...

Thanx much...

Magnus

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Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

27 posted 2001-12-30 02:25 PM

Mon Cherie...thank you...and a warm and
prosperous New Year to you as well.

Magnus

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Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

28 posted 2001-12-30 02:26 PM

Kethry...you are so right...sometimes it is
not enough...but we all hope it is...

Happy New Year....

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

29 posted 2001-12-30 02:28 PM

Victoria...thank you ...and I deeply agree..
I would rather someone never say that they
love me than to say it and it not be true..
That feeling goes both ways...

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