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Streen
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0 posted 2001-12-23 09:24 PM


The slightest tinge in the ocean,
The quaintest hurt in thee,
Is felt a surf on the other shore.
And far much more by me.


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Hehe, sorry for the change of things, folks. I haven't written a single Christmas poem so far this year. Ikes, I'd better get on track. ^_~

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1 posted 2001-12-23 09:32 PM


oh, I like this very much
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2 posted 2001-12-23 09:34 PM


Streen, this is beautiful, and I love it!
*Holiday Hugs, Nancy*

*~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~*

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3 posted 2001-12-23 09:38 PM




(smiles) Oh Streen, this is so beautiful, I love the imagery you create with your words! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Streen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shgine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2001-12-23 09:40 PM


What a wonderful metaphorical comparison! This is GOOD!
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5 posted 2001-12-23 10:14 PM


nicely said, I believe you wanted to say 'as surf' instead of 'a surf'. Happy Holidays to you!


Streen
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6 posted 2001-12-23 10:18 PM


Well, no, actually, I meant "a surf". It's a metaphor, not a simile. ^_^

Thank you all for your comments. ^_^ It definitely makes a poet feel appreciated inside when his poetry is so praised.

-Derek

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7 posted 2001-12-23 10:54 PM


Ooo, I really enjoyed this one.  So much emotion in so few lines!  Great job!  Merry Christmas!
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