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The Slightest Tinge in the Ocean
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The Slightest Tinge in the Ocean |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169
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The quaintest hurt in thee, Is felt a surf on the other shore. And far much more by me. -------------- Hehe, sorry for the change of things, folks. I haven't written a single Christmas poem so far this year. Ikes, I'd better get on track. ^_~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh, I like this very much  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Streen, this is beautiful, and I love it! *Holiday Hugs, Nancy* *~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~* |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Streen, this is so beautiful, I love the imagery you create with your words! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Streen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shgine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a wonderful metaphorical comparison! This is GOOD! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
nicely said, I believe you wanted to say 'as surf' instead of 'a surf'. Happy Holidays to you! |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169 |
Well, no, actually, I meant "a surf". It's a metaphor, not a simile. ^_^ Thank you all for your comments. ^_^ It definitely makes a poet feel appreciated inside when his poetry is so praised. -Derek |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Ooo, I really enjoyed this one. So much emotion in so few lines! Great job! Merry Christmas! |
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