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Open Poetry #17

first bruising by love

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2001-12-21 11:49 AM

my gaze was fixed resolutely on
the bus ticket my clumsy fingers were trying
in vain to fold into a paper heart~
It constituted my entire universe

you were amusing yourself with my handphone,
oblivious to my carefully worded, subtle questions
when you induced an eclipse of my soul
by disclosing your affections for another

robbed of the chance to congratulate myself
on my ingenuity,
I was forced to attend a heart contractive operation

I was able
to keep my voice
bright and cheery.
my corny jokes kept erupting,
much like a dazzling fireworks display
I had misgivings
about my life-sustainer's condition though

do they use concentrated acid as anaesthetic these days?

my fragmented bus ticket lay on the floor
they were like splinters,
pricking my absolute vision away
I wish someone would just
take my darned heart away~
A hole is better than a whole that hurts

[This message has been edited by faterider (12-21-2001 11:49 AM).]

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

1 posted 2001-12-21 11:56 AM

For a person who says that they are not proficient in the English language, you surely know how to use that language when displaying your heart and soul in fonts.
Sure there may be some slight grammatical errors, but your mind gets the jist of the language rather well.

"A hole is better than a whole that hurts."

Now that is a profound statement.

I enjoyed your write.

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