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Awaiting the Night- Lady in White's language challenge
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Awaiting the Night- Lady in White's language challenge |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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The gloom of winter day grows soft As eventide befalls I meet thou swift and meet thou oft Between these hallow'd walls My prayer and passion in this place Can deign to lovers tryst When I behold thy radiant face And think when we first kiss'd Beneath yon altar worn by prayer My prayer is answered soon I behold thou waiting there Silhouetted by yon moon In winter's dark at eventide My love has troth to keep I wing forth, stand at thy side And love in shadows deep Come the morn in winter's cold My love forsakes my plight In light of day no longer bold To wait again yon night Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Our Kethry, would you please look at this? Ah my friend, this is so delightful, and I was surprised to see you take up the challenge so soon! I am glad I was able to stop in today and not only that, but be among the first to say Brava! I will wait till after the holidays for my next challenge to you. Even good girls deserve a break or two! This was wonderful! Thank you so much for accepting the challenge! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Kethry this was awesome.......excellent as always my dear friend  ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well I dont know what the challenge was...but I know this poem is waaay cool... Kethry I love the phrasing and language style in this and the vocab... most of all your rhyme divine. Your muse seems to know no limits, your poetry grows and glows with each new write. well done poetess girlie jm You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling sister of my soul, and collector of my tears, Oh darling girl what did I say? I said it was outstanding didn't I? Yes yes, see what sitting up at 2am does for you Now don't say I don't do anything for you. What do you mean I don't? I do have other things to do you know! Okay it's a lie I would rather talk to you than clean the fluff out of my keyboard I admit it. Ohhhhhhh as if I could ever fool you. It's true you are my sister of soul, and I think most everyone knows you love me. And yes I love you too. (Audible aside to the audience she makes me say these things, or she beats me up) That may well have something to do with the 11 hour time difference, She beats me up get it. She's half a day ahead of me People it's pantomime season, almost anything goes. You wait until the bad jokes start. Anyway this is utterly utterly wonderful, so are you. Write on my darling sister of soul    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
Kethry, This piece was very lovely, and the use of the language is exquisite! For some reason, I am reminded of A.E. Housman -- must be the language and the visuals that I get. Well done! ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kethry...A beautiful name...and a very superbly written poem...much enjoyed..loved the OLD language style...Does that have something to do with the challenge? |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Kethry, I don't know what the challange was..... but it whatever it was ... this is simply beautiful. Very much enjoyed.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
thank you everyone, for those interested...I wrote a poem using the word fyffe, being illegitimate *wink* I didn't know there was any other way to spell it. Lady in White wrote saying she was expecting olde wold language with the word and was disappointed...she challenged all poets to write using the speling of the time and rather than disappoint her (after all you never know who's watching at this time of year) I dashed off this small piece. Now I pass on the challenge to anyone who can write a period piece using the language, style and speling of the day. Good luck! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown [This message has been edited by Kethry (12-21-2001 05:24 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You met the challenge well, Kethry, I think I shall attempt to take you up on it! |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Kethry,absolutely beautiful  You know we just don`t talk like that in NC.   Juanita |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ A stunning piece~ Happy Holidays to you, my friend~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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