Open Poetry #17 |
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why is it so 'two-dimensionally' cold? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium ![]() |
I wish I had known that it was going to go all so wrong -- for me but, I am glad, you see that it is going to be all so right -- for you why did they promise that I was the golden boy, and that I could never lose that shine in my eyes I wish I had seen that those were all such a pack of lies I wish I had known ... did you ever realize in those moments of choice what were to become of me and did you even see that it wasn't me alone you were turning away from now, the rain drops down in slow drips, upon my anxious roofs of uncertainty I wish you had known ... I think of you now and all the sadness falls away -- from me wondering if you knew why I have lost the light in my eyes but, somehow I am glad that questions never came to haunt -- you I'm glad you hadn't known ... and I wish it weren't so two-dimensionally c o l d o l d ! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
now, the rain drops down in slow drips, upon my anxious roofs of uncertainty ========================= this is an angst filled aching write Sudhir... the formating added to its emote. clever word play on the thought of two dimensional. well done my poet of brilliance. take care groovy-gator ![]() jm You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Two dimensional cold is quite visually laden, my friend... This is an excellent write. Hoping all is well... ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Emotively moving piece~ 'I wish I had known that it was going to go all so wrong -- for me but, I am glad, you see that it is going to be all so right -- for you' Yet tempered with a bit of joy for someone else~ ... Nice~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, You should have brought her into the third deminsion. That's where all the warmth is. Excellent write. Enjoyed |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
enjoyed as always my friend. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (sigh) Such questions and unrest fills these heartaching words, dearest friend, I hope this isn't realted to a recent event! (big hugggssssss) You always write so wonderfully, dearest friend, we all love you so very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing! ![]() ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You keep writing, Sudhir, and I'll keep reading. This is wonderful. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hmmmmmmm. . . I'm wondering what exactly "two-dimensionally cold" is. . . could it be a chill that is both in the heart and the soul? could it be the coldness between two people?? or. . . could it be the chill between night and day??? you make me think with this one my friend. . . and that's always a good thing. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all very much... you are all so wonderful and kind in the most terrific sense of the word... Regards, Sudhir |
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