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You're Lonely........
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You're Lonely........ |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Have you ever sat on the sand? And watched the grains slip through your hand Heard the silence of your lips And tasted salty finger tips Have you gazed into the sky? And seen a widowed cloud drift by Caught the breeze and let it go Bathed in sunshine’s after glow Smelt the dew of early morn Picked an ear of empty corn Glimpsed the horizon pristine clear Wiped the trail of your first tear Fought a storm at dead of night Given in without a fight Seen an angel touched the sky Listened to a baby’s cry Thought of meaning retired confused Broken beaten and feeling used Searched for truth but finding hate Stumbled through the golden gate Held your breath and crashed right on To find you’re fear and loathing gone Counting the stars up in the sky In bewilderment you sit and cry And as the waves around you dance Giving hope a second chance You’ve imprisoned your self in your own fear But now the secret’s crystal clear These words with sculptured love I hone You’re lonely but you’re not……. ALONE Jon Mewett All these moments In time Will be Lost Like Tears in the rain [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 12-17-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, yes I have done all of this, all of this I can so identify with these feelings. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Let me first say that I have been on many a site where if one even uses the slightest of a cliche - they will be brow beaten. But I have always believed that cliches can and do serve a purpose in writing...if used properly and not for the sake of "cliche-ing." With that said, let me tell you this...I enjoyed the way you strung your lines together in rhyme and the message conveyed was conveyed rather well. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
The message in this is powerful.I have felt all of these feelings and am now finding out your words are true.I may feel these emotions and feel I'm alone but that is so far from the truth.For my friends here at passions and many more.Help to keep me up off of the floor. Peaches |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Absolutely stunning. This is a message that each heart and soul needs to hear. Magnificent. Thank you. This is the perfect start to my week. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Enjoyed Jon..so true and thank you for reminding us..nicely done.. ~Victoria~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Jon, Oh.... I can't tell you how much I love this. It really hit a chord with me.. thank you. Hugs to you, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx everybody you are very kind.......just to pick up on the cliche line of thought.. I feel if the art of poetry has one critisism it is that some poetry is in- accessible to a wide audience through obscure or abstact meaning that make understanding difficult. What is good art? My own view is that good art of any medium must move the emotions of the reader or viewer.This can be in a possitive or negative way. A cliche can be like a knife of understanding in a written form ........isn't life a cliche to quote a cliche? Stay warm Jon All these moments |
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