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Jon Mewett
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0 posted 2001-12-17 10:21 AM


Have you ever sat on the sand?
And watched the grains slip through your hand
Heard the silence of your lips
And tasted salty finger tips
Have you gazed into the sky?
And seen a widowed cloud drift by
Caught the breeze and let it go
Bathed in sunshine’s after glow
Smelt the dew of early morn
Picked an ear of empty corn
Glimpsed the horizon pristine clear
Wiped the trail of your first tear
Fought a storm at dead of night
Given in without a fight
Seen an angel touched the sky
Listened to a baby’s cry
Thought of meaning retired confused
Broken beaten and feeling used
Searched for truth but finding hate
Stumbled through the golden gate
Held your breath and crashed right on
To find you’re fear and loathing gone
Counting the stars up in the sky
In bewilderment you sit and cry
And as the waves around you dance
Giving hope a second chance
You’ve imprisoned your self in your own fear
But now the secret’s crystal clear
These words with sculptured love I hone
You’re lonely but you’re not……. ALONE


Jon Mewett




All these moments
In time
Will be Lost
Like Tears in the rain


[This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 12-17-2001).]

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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-12-17 10:25 AM


Oh, yes I have done all of this, all of this I can so identify with these feelings.

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13
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2 posted 2001-12-17 10:25 AM


Let me first say that I have been on many a site where if one even uses the slightest of a cliche - they will be brow beaten. But I have always believed that cliches can and do serve a purpose in writing...if used properly and not for the sake of "cliche-ing."

With that said, let me tell you this...I enjoyed the way you strung your lines together in rhyme and the message conveyed was conveyed rather well.

peaches73533
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since 2001-11-04
Posts 981
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3 posted 2001-12-17 10:30 AM


The message in this is powerful.I have felt all of these feelings and am now finding out your words are true.I may feel these emotions and feel I'm alone but that is so far from the truth.For my friends here at passions and many more.Help to keep me up off of the floor.
Peaches

Startime
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4 posted 2001-12-17 10:35 AM


Absolutely stunning. This is a message that each heart and soul needs to hear. Magnificent. Thank you. This is the perfect start to my week. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Victoria
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5 posted 2001-12-17 10:39 AM


Enjoyed Jon..so true and thank you for reminding us..nicely done..

                         ~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

                                            Pablo Picasso


rosepetals25
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6 posted 2001-12-17 10:40 AM


Jon,

     Oh.... I can't tell you how much I love this. It really hit a chord with me.. thank you.

Hugs to you,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

7 posted 2001-12-17 10:52 AM


Thanx everybody you are very kind.......just to pick up on the cliche line of thought..

I feel if the art of poetry has one critisism it is that some poetry is in- accessible to a wide audience through obscure or abstact meaning that make understanding difficult.

What is good art? My own view is that good art of any medium must move the emotions of the reader or viewer.This can be in a possitive or negative way.

A cliche can be like a knife of understanding
in a written form ........isn't life a cliche to quote a cliche?

Stay warm

Jon

All these moments
In time
Will be Lost
Like Tears in the rain

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