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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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You Are You are the apple of my eye, the candy of my sigh The pink upon my face of shy, my favorite cherry pie You are the wind upon my sail, the breath of flowers I inhale. You are the touch of silent Braille that hides behind the veil. The soft upon a velvet glove, the whiteness of a dove The sun that shines the sky above, the essence of my love You are a magic butterfly that flies within the evening sky On currents of a shifting high, that brings my heart to sigh. You are the evening shade of blue, the crystal in the dew You are the ever changing new, the only thing I know is true. You are the shadow on my door, the essence of my awe You are the tea within my pour, the treasure that I store. I see you in the mornings bright; you’re always in my sight I dream of you within the light and sleep with you at night I muse of you in constant why, mostly in an inner sigh but I cannot speak for I am shy and if you knew I’d think I’d die. I’ll bide this poem forever, a secret mystery And hide it in a bottle and drop it in the sea. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my ... look at all these wonderful rhymes throughout! Love the inner and double rhyme scheme here Seymour ... a lovely flow to this piece, and such a beautiful ending. Very much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, I always treasure your answers. *L* |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Sy, I think this would put a warm smile on the face of any "you." I especially liked the line: You are the touch of silent Braille that hides behind the veil. A very creative touch, indeed. -MVS "Your focus determines your reality." --Qui-Gon from The Phantom Menace |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet Seymour, such breathtaking rhyme and imagery fill these tender words! (sigh) May she get your message in a bottle and be one with your heart forever! (sigh) Sooooooo beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Big thank you. Vandanna, Enjoyed your enjoy. Mistletoe, Better watch out they are going to hang you from the rafters soon. LOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You are the wind upon my sail, the breath of flowers I inhale. You are the touch of silent Braille that hides behind the veil. (could that line be any cooler)  ======================================= You are a magic butterfly that flies within the evening sky On currents of a shifting high, that brings my heart to sigh. You are the evening shade of blue, the crystal in the dew You are the ever changing new, the only thing I know is true. ====================================== I see you in the mornings bright; you’re always in my sight I dream of you within the light and sleep with you at night I muse of you in constant why, mostly in an inner sigh but I cannot speak for I am shy and if you knew I’d think I’d die. I’ll bide this poem forever, a secret mystery And hide it in a bottle and drop it in the sea. ==================================== OH MY ... OH SY ... OH *SIGH* ON HIGH!! Have mercy Stinky....I'll be back .... (ohilwywlt)   PS .. Youre adorable when your shy *L* *winkiewinkie* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I found a bottle on the shore ... inside a heart's secrets held in store. Whispered words written of adore ... a heart's pour not heard before. Veiled verses cast into ocean blue ... a poet's construe in silent subdue. Rhymes of enchanted imbue ... cadenced confess of a heart hued true. A love so grand it took command ... heart in hand held in demand. Afraid none would understand ... he set it free upon the sea and sand. As I read his rhymes I began to sigh ... he'd written his love across the sky. Penned his heart upon Heaven's high ... but too shy to fly, he dared not try. So he cast his confess into the sea ... believing it not meant to be. Never meant for another's eyes to see ... his words set sail on destiny. Now I found this treasured find ... words entwined in poetic remind. My eyes no longer in bind of blind ... the gift of his traces left behind. His heart and soul in poetic spill ... his promise to love her beyond until. With his words I felt the thrill of fulfill ... "You are there, yet here with me still." ~*~  ~*~ once again...dear Sy-babers ...I thank you for the inspiration.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, I thought you would never find it. LOL Love your poem. WW R S |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
What a shame to hide such sweet devotion in a watery grave...take the risk...put your shyness in the bottle, and give her the poem...you will be so glad you did...beautifully done! |
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Shou-Lao Junior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 48 |
Nice use of internal rhyme. Thanks for the chance to read |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dulcinea, Thanks for the beautifully done. Shou-Lao, Thank you for the read. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
That's it!!! I'm calling Hallmark!!! This belongs on a card...I'm serious!!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Amusemi, I'll think about it, thank you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Sy! *sigh* |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Wow! That's a lot of Wow! Rhyme Divine and so much more. That bottle would be worth dredging the sea for. LOL! A jewel dear Seymour! Peace and Love! Sincerely, Regina |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Denise my sweet. *L* Regina, Dredging the sea? LOL a delightful reply. *L* |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'You are the evening shade of blue, the crystal in the dew You are the ever changing new, the only thing I know is true. You are the shadow on my door, the essence of my awe You are the tea within my pour, the treasure that I store.' This is one fantastic write! I am truly impressed by the rhymes, too...excellently written... sp   p.s. ahem...not too shabby reply from J, either...  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow Seymour, this is gorgeous. I too love the double rhyming in it. What lovely romance in these words. Love JM's poem too. You have both written truly beautiful pieces here. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!!You sure like to make us stand up and take notice. Magnificent.  **hugs**   Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sy, after all the superlatives have been used what can I say? Will a simple 'thank you' suffice? I hope so. This is incredible! Hugs. Nancy. "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy-- You can try to drown emote but thing is sweet man with these words you float |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
My husband wrote a poem for me once, the only one he ever penned called "You Are" this is equally as beautiful. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Snowpants, Thank you for the excellent. Tracey, JM and I both thank you. *L* Startime, Thanks for the mag and hugs. *L* Nancy, Every time. *L* Martie, Love your comment. *L* Irish, WOW, thank you. *L* |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sy, Incredible write. You got the girls swooning and the boys back at their computers hacking, hoping to get some of that attention. LOL JM gave you a matching book-end. Great job...you two! |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
I love this.Wow.You have used all five senses and I love it.Don't be too shy. Peaches |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I do believe that you just said every single word a woman wants to hear and never does! Heck I would have been happy with even a couple of those a year, perhaps I better print this and keep it handy for reference in interviewing if there is a next time LOL. Oh this was fantastic, and JM was no slouch in her response either. ~*~ May the spirit of this season live in your heart all year through ~*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Larry C, LOL Thanks for the incredible. Peaches, Thanks for the gererous WOW. Mysteria, LOL If I could have found more words I would have used them. *L* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I so dislike being interrupted when I know the "good stuff" is out there...but on the other hand [there's always an "other hand" y'know?] I'm sort of glad I didn't get to this until today....what with the double whammy of two wonderful poets singing... gotta love it all... Lady will be SO pleased! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You shine me a glorious day. *L* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It's worth going a weekend without poetry when I can immerse my mind in such excellence when the wait is over, Seymour... this is a delightful read! *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 12-17-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, The delight is mine in having you read me. Thank you and *L* |
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