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Advice to Kevin
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Advice to Kevin |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Advice for Kevin My sympathies young sir your charge was like a blur But you missed a mile by a parry of his wrist. In fencing toe to toe you do not charge the foe Subtlety and flexibility is the key and always watch the eyes. Their expression and their sighs and Yet even some of those will lie. You must shift and lunge and never plunge And feel your feel touch by touch as slyly as an eel Your wrist and blade will do the work Your rashness will but bring a smirk. Fencing is an art my friend of move and countermove And if he is a master and such be the case He will slip his blade around your cup And flip it out and up into empty space. Disarming you to the mercy of his circling tip With which he may flip and nip you on the nose. Or what ever else he may purpose. I’ve done some fencing in my day And know the feel of a master’s sway. And the way he plays with time and space To put one down in a proper place Be grateful if he plays with you Instead of just running you through With flow and subtle bid he could unbar the lid And scar the inner sanctum of your ID. You play with fire my friend and I see but a dire end My advice would be to close Pandora’s box And blame it on confusions paradox. Let not the cheering of the crowd Open up the ego’s proud. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BRAVA! |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is very good. Enjoyed reading. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well, I havent read all these duels...cant keep up in here anymore...but what ever advice you, my oh so wise Stinky would give ... would always be advice well taken. Love the phrases, metaphor and vocab of COOL in this Sy-babes. Your wisdom is showing along side your talent.. it's an impressive, lovely view  *ww* :heart me You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Makes me think of that line from The Untouchables, "Never bring a knife to a gun fight." A fine read Sir Tabin and sound advice for us all. Peace. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, Sy, your wisdom is exceeded only by your desire to help the young through troubled waters..hats off to you, sir |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Impressive on many levels, Sy. Well done, Sir. -MVS "If you don't ask: you don't get." -Steve Miller |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thank you for the bravo. *L* Smart Chick, Thank you for the enjoy. *L* JM, You are a true blue butterfly Love ya Sy Andrew, You are so right, thank you. Balladeer, And my hat is off to you master of refrain and other things. Mark, A welcome comment, thank you. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Easy it is to say I am crazy For choosing to rattle our cage just a bit Excitement alone is the feeling that pays me And pockets are full with this new game of wit Our great deer well knows that I may have my brights on But the car is merely rolling at him slow And its all in fun that I have set my sights on The one who has been the lead role in our show So know that I'm aware our deer friend can fence I'll still try to get some laughs at his expense |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, Kevin! You're using class, style and some really clever stuff to make this fun...I can't ask for any more than that  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kevin, I understand and so does Balladeer. Enjoy |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sy, Fine job. Love the additional participation in a PIP joust. What fun. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, this jousting is bringing everyone in from the sidelines. FUN stuff. Good words of wisdom, Sy. But I'm rootin for that young whipper-snapper. |
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