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A Thousand Eternities
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A Thousand Eternities |
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WhiteKnight Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 83NY |
A Thousand Eternities By Cor A thousand eternities slip through the sands of the hour glass As I wait to see my love again. The void of my existence yearns to be filled with her presence. Time flows by like molasses on a cold winter’s day My heart rips as I hear her deny our destiny, Every time she holds back what her heart desires to say. My soul yearns for the completion of hers Can the feelings be wrong as my whole being revels in them? Will she deny forever the truth of her heart? The silence of her words deafens me, she’s always ready to flee Locked away afraid to let others see she fears who she might be Must we fear ourselves, always afraid others will judge who we are? Shall we always hide never to be free? I offer her me, not the facade I let others see Will she set herself free? Can we ever be? http://corz.info you care for someone give them always a safe place to cry and never a reason to need it" --K. DeElle [This message has been edited by WhiteKnight (edited 12-11-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* to fear love is something I have a lot of understanding of. I hope she has the strength it takes to stop running and let you hold her safely in your arms. A poem that touched the core of me. Very well done. **hugs**   Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent...lots of feelings...lots of variety in word selection...powerful message. Your spelling of "heart" should be just that, not "hart"....very well written...lots of emotion. And not too long... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) My heart cries out to you and the tears you feel. (sigh) I pray with all my heart that she will be free and her heart will beat with yours in eternal happiness and love! (sigh) So sa dbut beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet knight, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Gorgeous poem, such tender feelings. It’s so frustrating when someone hides behind a wall and refuses to come out (speaks she who has hidden behind one many a time.lol). All one can do is slowly take the wall down, one brick at a time. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
Poems are about feelings and letting others see those feelings. I think you did that well in this one. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"The silence of her words deafens me, she’s always ready to flee Locked away afraid to let others see she fears who she might be Must we fear ourselves, always afraid others will judge who we are?" It's sad when we permit the opinions of others to allow us to disavow love. A very tender write. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
I offer her me, not the facade I let others see ---------------------- Wow......wonderful....and awesome.... ~sigh~ It has touched me deeply... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Oh yes time will tell this story...James |
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WhiteKnight Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 83NY |
Startime, Thank you. I think she has recently started to accept what she feels as real. Magnus, Thank you for your comments and for catching my spelling error (opps) I have corrected it now. :-) Mistletoe Angel, Thank you so much your comments mean the world to me. :-):-) "(tears fall down my cheeks) My heart cries out to you and the tears you feel. (sigh) I pray with all my heart that she will be free and her heart will beat with yours in eternal happiness and love! (sigh) So sa dbut beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet knight, thank you for sharing!" Tracey, Thank you. I have been "working" on this wall for a year now... The Rusty Knight, Thank you. I am very happy with this one.:-) Midnitesun, Thank you, for the kind words. MyEnchanted_Melody, I am so glad I can share my feelings here with all of you! JamesMichael, Thank you. (sigh) I hope I like the ending! :-) http://corz.info "If you care for someone give them always a safe place to cry and never a reason to need it" --K. DeElle |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I understand this situation, and appreciate the poem. It is beautiful. I hope the ending is happily ever after. Sandra |
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