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Open Poetry #17

The Naked Hills

Glenn Logan
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since 2001-10-10

Posts 111
Virginia

0 posted 2001-12-11 11:07 AM

The leaves have fallen from the hardwood trees,
leaving them a variety of grayish browns, some
almost black, and even most of the evergreens
have turned darker, drier, starker.

With the branches bare, the shapes of the hills
and the contours of the once-hidden landscape
are now much more apparent -- like the
unexpectedly fine curves
of a older woman's bare body
unexpectedly viewed.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-12-11 11:13 AM

For several decades of reasons...this likes me very much!!!

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

2 posted 2001-12-11 11:54 AM

Great metaphors, here, Glenn. I like the flow of it, and the brevity. It says a lot with very little fluff. Good job.

Sunshine - I like your response...the personalization of the poem. Did you notice the metaphor for all the wrinkles? And the liver spots? And the sagging parts? Did you notice those too? heh

inot2B
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

3 posted 2001-12-11 03:41 PM

My body has aged, and I like the way you compare trees to an older woman's body. Heck I just hope nobody wants to chop me into firewood, at least not yet.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2001-12-11 03:48 PM

Could also be compared to an older man's body.

You have said this so eloquently..

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