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Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

0 posted 2001-12-11 04:19 AM

This is an exploration
a deportation of my thoughts
to the surface of papered woes.
Believe in me if you must
but I feel the fade coming on
like the drown before the darkness taps.
This is me entangled
within the resting place of my heart
dreamed of, but not spoken of.
While tongues wrap around my name in voice
while eyes embrace my squirming words
I am broken into pieces
and fed little by little
to the places that are empty within you.
Will I ever be enough to fill your all?
Will you ever be strong enough to take my fall?
This is an exploration of my voice
a desperation of thoughts
quickened by the blood coarsing through
missing you veins.
I am once again caught
trapped
heartbeat fluttering in thundered fright.
This is respiration of my heart
an expiration of my pain
a total me in you
a sadness drain.
This is an exploration of the deportation
of my willing spirit
sending itself on fluff and wings to you.
Will airmail kisses suffice
when the destination is you?

I am many.

[This message has been edited by Siofra (edited 12-11-2001).]

Domzi
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

1 posted 2001-12-11 06:57 AM

Talk about a deep poem! I especially liked the line: When airmail kisses suffice when the destination is you? Beautiful...

Poetry is spiritual ventilation!

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

2 posted 2001-12-11 07:51 AM

Domzi,
Thank you.

I wasn't sure how to end it, so I just let it come as naturally as I could.

I am many.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-12-11 10:52 PM

I'm sure that they will. . . for whoever you're sending them to. . .

I like the ending. . . it's perfect. . . great job. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

4 posted 2001-12-11 11:10 PM

Very good.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2001-12-12 12:12 PM

This poem has a life of its own, as it seemed to breathe and move about with little effort or push. I like it, it is full of emotion.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-12-12 12:19 PM

I could have sworn I responded to this, I thought I remembered reading it, it's very flowing all the way down the page, I love how you do that by the way.

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

7 posted 2002-02-11 08:49 PM

You don't mind if I shuffle through your archives do you??

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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