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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Repost: Condensed Paintings of singular call. Harangue, hang and brood my wall. Points of paint induced to meld Produced while my breath was held. Brought to a myopic bed. Mental gold turned pigment lead. Colors brought to fires bright Dimensions of hyper sight.. Tender phantoms caught in draw. Brushed and fixed in pigment store. Caught and held a final goal Gems implanted by my soul. To me they are my total cry Dramatic as a Van Gogh sky. Reinforced in poets rhyme. Memories of my loves and time. Sprawled to boast to each soul of call My ghosts that hang upon the wall. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like this version much better....it is tight, and wraps around me like cellophane... very very good, Sy-guy.... Keep it up. I could use a dose or two of you more often, but if I only get one a day... it's good medicine! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I never saw the other..but I had shadows and ghosts upon my walls every night, made it hard to sleep for these few years...I think I have put many to rest now...and maybe they will be visiting others now instead..*s I enjoy your words, Sy. Maureen "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thank you sweet lady. You haven't shown me a cloudy day yet. *L* Maureen, Glad your shadows are fading and thank you for the read. *L* |
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Shou-Lao Junior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 48 |
I well presented picture. Thanks for the chance to read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Points of paint induced to meld Produced while my breath was held. (could that be any cooler?...me thinks not)  Brought to a myopic bed. Mental gold turned pigment lead. Colors brought to fires bright Dimensions of hyper sight.. ==================================== To me they are my total cry Dramatic as a Van Gogh sky. Reinforced in poets rhyme. Memories of my loves and time. Sprawled to boast to each soul of call My ghosts that hang upon the wall. ======================================= Every dream you pen in wisdom's hue ... paints a self portrait reflecting true. Every thought you pen in rhythmed rhyme ... carves your place in infinity's time. One only needs to read between the lines to view, I do so treasure my poetic gallery of you.   *winkiewinkie*  me |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Shou-Lao, Thank you so much. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Your butterfly wings have mesmerized me. By color and your raspbery tea. Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I enjoyed the read so much...I so would like to see the paintings. It seems, by your poem, that they would reveal a good deal of who you are inside. Yes, of course, your poetry does...but the moods in the color would surely enlighten even more. The words here cause a mystery filtered through illusion, very enigmatic.  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, It's true you can read painting by color, line and direction of line. Thank you for the lovely comment. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Soooooooo gorgeous! (sigh) Your beautiful words always paint hues and values like Van Gogh, I love it!!! (smiles) May these ghosts of inspiration always bring light to your heart as your beautiful heart writes your visions down! (smiles) I love it!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
This is so lovely ... sometimes we need those ghosts on the wall to remind of who we are. Your words just seem to capture the essence of the phantoms that live around us all. ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Noah. Chelle, Nice comment, thank you. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Spirit...talent, color of your emotions, captured memories. Expressionism! Sublime. Hugs! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rwood, Could not ask for more. *L* |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A mini self-portrait of a true artist. Thank you for this lovely gift. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
this poem is beautiful!! you know what would be a good idea? You should find a way to include some of your paintings with the poem! eh?? ehh???? |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Seymour,I think you showed alot of emotion in this poem Great Job!  Juanita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Midnitesun, A wonderful comment, thank you. Eagle, Good idea but allot are gone. North carolina Girl, Thank you for the great job. |
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