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The Woman In Your Distant View
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The Woman In Your Distant View |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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 Look there! Do you see her arriving? She is in her own time a travelling world created by her sublime thought. She is poet and painter of touch the flavor of her cinnamon fire is yet unmatched and the golden precious of her smile has been commented on in whispers by men who survived the flower of the tempt but still have watering lips aching to know the briefness of such skin. Do you see her there among the flowers? her feet cowering beneath the petals beneath the leaves bared and whispering those feet tickle the ground ahhh..a ground that knows to bow beneath the feel of her feet whether faltering or confidently moving along. Do you see how she just glows when all else withers around her how the light shines just to spotlight her soft and tender eyes. Does she have them fooled into a fool's follow when they all look on after her as if she were some lost treasure meant to be plucked by one final daring adventurer? Does she, indeed have truly one eye that would follow her to the depths were she to fall and sink and roll over staring upward looking for a hand, and would they, with greed, glitter and sell her although she is priceless or would they care for her with loving fingers fingers unfencing. Look there! Do you see her coming your way now? Who is this lady, this woman this child? This wonderous, enslaving potion of the heart that so few dare to know because of one small unjust label located on her left cheek? Does the battle scar she wears from fights with armies of tears give so much to their wrong impression that she is unjust in her name? She, the Temptress Tamed once by love twice by pain. Could it be so wrong to have a loving palm embedded in her soul again? Should she feel the need to unclothe herself before those who would read only uneducated glances into the story of her name? Indeed, she should not for she is the Temptress created for lust captured by love pained by loss unearthed by friends within herself. Queen of her land of names and unfathomable in her depth, and untouchable by your lowly opinions that you try to disguise as wealth in thought. Lady, do not come any closer, for you will never glow like she does. Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 12-08-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!!Absolutely stunning. You have written masterpieces before but this deep soul felt poem is exceptional. You will always leave me in awe of the depth of feeling you put into your words. BRAVO!!!  **hugs**Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You have outdone yourself. This IS a masterpiece. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Incredible write!! ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 CLAPPING WILDLY!!! BRAVO!!! YES, THE TEMPTRESS SHINES WITH A HEART OF LOVE AND DETERMINATION!!! (smiles) WOW!!! This is fabulous!!! Your words and heart shine so beautifully, this is a timeless classic! I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet Jennifer! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Ahh..Startime!  You are sweet to say so, although I doubt I have written many masterpieces.  I am so glad that you enjoyed this. It was a new thing for me to just put it all out there and be so confident. Thank you again. Irish Rose, Thank you, Lady. This is no masterpiece...just the stirrings of things within me that I enjoy bring to light once in a while. Enchantress! Thank you so much for reading! Your confidence and enjoyment of my work is incredible to me, also. Noah, You are, once again, very sweet and generous in your reply. Yes..Temptress was always the determined one. It seems that I have become her in some ways, although not many reach beyond the sensual nature of that name. I am thankful for those who do. Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this is the writing that I like to see from you. . . writing that comes from deep inside of your heart and soul. . . and when it comes. . . it flows like a river that breaks the levee. . . wow. . . simply outstanding. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Woohooooooo!!!! You constantly amaze me...where do you pull these words from, what depth of YOU? I'm saying WOW, and hope that's allowed and doesn't embarrass you. Wonderful, sweet friend. (((hugs)))Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Jeffrey E. Osborne Member
since 2001-11-01
Posts 160out there |
Beautiful writing that offers an equally beautiful glimpse of your tender heart! I especially love the lines: "the flavor of her cinnamon fire is yet unmatched and the golden precious of her smile has been commented on in whispers by men who survived the flower of the tempt but still have watering lips aching to know the briefness of such skin." Such powerful imagery in your choice of words! - Jeff |
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