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This Music (do not read, unless aloud)
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This Music (do not read, unless aloud) |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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This Music People run out of freshness don’t they The words, the same words the old words no new words but they were fresh words once weren’t they How? how does freshness work they are only words, old words no new words I say to you . . . and it is fresh in old words you say Is it an echo in that space in my head that working space where words get chased about free to float and fly to boast and bounce to cringe and cry I have said nothing new and yet . . . and yet I try to write what I cannot Here is not the place not the space I must speak you this music of words I must . . . ((not fair if you don't speak this aloud!)) © 12.06.01 (thank you S.O.) [This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 12-07-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey e--glad to see you posting again... and yes, it's hard to write fresh, and even more difficult to keep the heart fresh. You have managed to do both. And now? smile--hello, I must be going! Enjoyed.  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i read it fresh as bread baked, fed word by word forming harmony scaled in chords of verse (wonderful writing! thank you!) |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
oh, and it was very fair... i read it aloud... lol!!!  (isn't that how all poetry should be read?) |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
K, Yes it has been dry here, in my head. Thanks for peeking in. doreen, Thanks I appreciate your comments very much. And I agree, it is hard to hear the music of a flat page. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
"Is it an echo in that space in my head that working space where words get chased about free to float and fly to boast and bounce to cringe and cry" This is really good, and I don't think any poet would disagree. Enjoyed very much. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Enjoyed this very very much as I read it ALOUD! Excellent...well done! *btw, love the pic!* ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I sat at your feet and listened to the words of wisdom as they flowed from your pen. Very well done. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
never thought of it quite that way, but yes, people do run out of freshness. Thanks for instilling a mood in me. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
well I read it too, and it is beautiful...glad I my curiosity won from your *do not read*.... ((hugs)) Charisma ~*Theresia~* |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i cant possibly love this enough, e! the abstract nature of it..just....hugs me!   (i had to whisper it--forgive me!..sleeping people around...!) hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
e, "I must speak you this music of words I must . . ." this is my favorite part but LOVE every spoken word of this...h |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
are you the crawdad that lives near willits, ca? WARNING: this reader is not prone to terse, canned comments. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I celebrate myself, and sing myself, and what I shall assume, you shall assume for every atom belonging to me as good belongs to you. ~Excerpt from "Song of myself"~ Walt Whitman Yes! It's in the presentation and the willingness to perceive as such. Loud and Clear your music. Your photo is wonderful! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
mirror man, Good that you agree. Thanks. Nancy, Thanks for your kind comments and for reading ALOUD! Startime, "words of wisdom"? More flattery. Thanks! passing shadows, You certainly are welcome. Hope the mood lead to something. Charisma, Thanks much for your comment. Sorry about the 'do not read', but it really fit as a clue, I think. dg, Thanks, faithful reader friend! Whispering is good too. h, I say to you . . . and it is fresh in old words you say I must speak you this music of words I must . . . wornways, No, sorry, I'm deep in the heartland . . . (thanks for peekin in) Regina, Thanks for reading and for your compliments! I'm flattered that this should recall lines from 'Song of Myself'. ------- Thanks again to all. e [This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 12-10-2001).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Krawdad--To speak them rather than read them..is to freshen the thought with voice..thank you for this most valuable lesson. Much enjoyed your poem! |
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