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Doug Pretorius
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since 2001-04-08
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Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2001-12-03 08:17 PM


When Night Rushes In
December 3, 2001
Copyright 2001 Doug Pretorius

My darkest fear, when I lay silent and still
comes biting and burning
through velvet-clad eyes
In wake I hide, cowaring in the light
covering my tears with smiles of friends
morning and night, twenty-four hours seven
I’m broken and bleeding in my heart
my soul tears itself apart
How long I can stay awake, I don’t know
what’s waiting for me
is more terrifying than sleepless insanity
I huddle close to a fire
I’ve lit to ward off these evils
though they come from my mind
Even as I feel myself burning
the fear of the night rushes in
to hold me paralysed, I die

© Copyright 2001 Doug Pretorius - All Rights Reserved
Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
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1 posted 2001-12-03 09:38 PM


A nightmare that leaves one trembling. Very powerful. My heart goes out to you if this is a vision of your night. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

angelswing
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
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2 posted 2001-12-04 09:24 AM


Wow, nice dark imagery, I love the powerful thoughts you use in this poem . Enjoyed it, thanks .
L.of.L. Tommy .
XXX

'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

Doug Pretorius
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since 2001-04-08
Posts 81
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2001-12-04 09:57 AM


Startime & angelswing: Thank you! I hope you got a good shiver while reading it  
SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23
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4 posted 2001-12-04 10:08 AM


It's a terrible thing to live with so much fear. I hope your fear all goes away soon.
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