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Take Me Back To Yesterday - Marge's challenge
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Take Me Back To Yesterday - Marge's challenge |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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Take me back to yesterday or even the days before to sunshine and to happiness and maybe something more Today is not my day you know today is dark and gray and even if you smile at me I won't come out to play Take me back to yesterday when I was a little child I could roam the pastures then full of flowers wild Today is not my day you know for pastures are no more large buildings placed on land you see wich was green before Take me back to yesterday when loved ones weren't dead when I could hear them talking real not only in my head Today is not my day you know my head is full of voices constant ordering me around I have to make some choices Take me back to yesterday and I'll just skip tomorrow and maybe I forget about the gray and dark and sorrow Today is not my day you know but you can change that fast if you'll take me back to yesterday I'm sure I'll make it last A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Want to use the pics on my website? Just let me know. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/http://comm [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 12-01-2001).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Tita, if I could take you back to yesterday, I would. I would love to make your days much brighter. This is very good. I love it. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I know just how you feel. This poem touches my heart and is a wonderful poem for Marge's challenge. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very, very touching my friend. I love the way you write. jwesley |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Titia, I would love to go back to yesterday with you and we could play and skip and run through the wild flowers without a care in the world.  Well done, and a challenge well met! ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Titia, This is an excellent write and as they say a keeper. *L* |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I like the mood of this, fits my spirit for today. If only we could realize how good things at any given moment.. not wishing away our days.. while somethings get better other things get worse with time. Good poem. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is a wonderful poem Titia. Enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Titia, I do not know where this will rank among the contenders for the Challenge, but for me, it's a Keeper... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I know you would, for tomorrow is always full of such treasured memories, but I know that your future awaits with many more treasures, as will the love of many you've known always guide you! (big hugggsssssss) So beautiful and compassionate, sweet Titia, we all love you! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Titia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Nostalgia isn't what it used to be." I don't know who said it, but it was sent to me some months ago over the net. This is a beautiful "Yesterday" poem. If I could, I would send you back a few days or years, to where the grass was truly greener. (at least in your homeland, which I was lucky to see in spring '71 and again in summer of '72.) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Titia, beautifully done, poignant and wistful. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Dear friends, it will take too much of my precious internettime to answer to each of you, so I do it hereby. I didn't have a bad day, just came up with Marge's line. Thanks for your lovely replies. Sometimes it would be good if we could go back to yesterday, sometimes not. As my old neighbour used to say when I was talking about the 'good' old days: Nah, those old days weren't so good at all, hard handwork, no machines to ease the pain in your back. For none amount of money he would go back to 'the good old days'. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Titia, take me with you please to yesterday. enjoyed your poem a lot dear friend ((hugs)) Charisma ~*Theresia~* |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Charisma, thank you so much, yes maybe we should all go back to yesterday, maybe back to August, when all was still 'normal'.  TitiaA rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ My dear ... this is nostalgically lovely~ You sure seem to take to the 'challenges' of life quite poetically~ Love you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You have outdone yourself, titia. the way you contrast present and past in each stanza is very powerful and leaves a strong impression...excellent, excellent writing, my friend  |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Titia,I would love to go back to yesterday and see the loved ones I lost.This really touched me.  Juanita |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Take me back to yesterday when I was a little child I could roam the pastures then full of flowers wild Today is not my day you know for pastures are no more large buildings placed on land you see wich was green before Love the repetition of the 'Today is not my day...' line. One of my new favorites from you, Titia. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a wonderful poem this is Titia, you just keep getting better and better. The contrasts in the lines were wonderful, and you have answered the challenge well (saw the rules now thanks for sending them)! ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Titia - This is really fine writing. I have read it twice now, and that says something for how well it is structured. Very nicely done. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Titia, For me, this really conveyed that sense of lost youth and of longing to regain it. Thank you for phrasing it so nicely. Doc |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thank you so much, I'm really honored by your responses. Oh my, my cheeks are all blushing  I got Balladeer and Long John agreeing  Thanks friends, Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This poem was very special, Titia. It reached deep into my soul. Thanks for sharing it.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Congratulations Titia! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
good poem..simply written but implies lots... Congrats for the win!  |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Excellent writing Titia.....I wish you could go back to Yesterday and just linger there forever....it sounds wonderful!!!!!!  HUGS!!!!!!! Congratulations....this was very good!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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