Open Poetry #16 |
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All I Can Be |
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Topheth Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 297Texas ![]() |
All I Can Be A constant desire to have lunch and talk, a spark which has burst into fire, a consuming dream of unquenchable thirst, a moon-lit walk in the park; A busy afternoon of playing like children, a whole day of nothing to do but you; A washer of dishes and planter of trees, a granter of wishes and enjoyer of tease; A shower of fun, a bath in the sun, an hour to savor in silence, a rush in the blood and flush of the skin, a touch of sin and passion’s kindness; A pillar of strength and whispers of love, a truth that is never in doubt, a kiss at length when the rain clouds above, a something you can’t do without; An understanding of fears, comfort for tears, a friend for many reasons and seasons and years - this is all I can be. Fall into me. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sigh* Are you reading my mind? I LOVE this! ![]() Don't gain my affections then cover my eyes. Don't sweep me off my feet then fail to catch me before I hit the floor. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
I love this poem! I like how it flows. Its also sounds very energetic. Great Write, Keep it up! ~Laura~ ![]() |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
with big brown eyes like those who could even try to tell you no?! wow.....many hearts breaking wide open tonight ![]() ![]() |
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Topheth Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 297Texas |
Thank you all. And SEA, why make me blush? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
an hour to savor in silence, a rush in the blood and flush of the skin, a touch of sin and passion’s kindness; A pillar of strength and whispers of love, a truth that is never in doubt, a kiss at length when the rain clouds above, a something you can’t do without; An understanding of fears, comfort for tears, a friend for many reasons and seasons and years - this is all I can be. Fall into me. =========================== this is wonderful, romantic and sweet with sincerety, and a poeticly perfect ending... well done poet sir jm Well I looked to the sky for my anthem |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
And who could ask for more than all you can be? I agree with Sea. Oh I mean I love it too ![]() Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Pip Member
since 2001-09-14
Posts 59 |
...these are a few of my favorite things... *Grins* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
this is all I can be. Fall into me. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh WOW!!!...not to mention those eyes...I mean...words, you write very well...and...oh my!! Enjoyed...enjoyed..enjoyed again! ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
This was great! You conveyed the feelings throughout the whole entire poem. Quite impressive...I really hate it when poems come on strong and end weak and vice versa. Well done! Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma [This message has been edited by sonjes (edited 09-19-2001).] |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy ![]() |
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Charisma![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow* what a lines....love it all! Charisma |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
this is all I can be. Fall into me. -------------------- That is all you can be.....? ![]() Just wonderful.....and sooooo lovely. Many would fall into you If all what you offer is true.... ![]() I greatly enjoyed it..... Thank you ************************** "Oh...me!Oh Life! |
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Topheth Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 297Texas |
. [This message has been edited by Topheth (edited 09-21-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This dances! Enjoyed! Thank you! |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
I'd take just one of these lines and run with it! :::sigh::: Good job |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Topheth, Well done, enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
WELL...just when I thought it was safe to pop back into the forum! Write sweet words and make me think naughty thoughts! (I KNOW--it's such a challenge ![]() ![]() |
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Topheth Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 297Texas |
LOL - you all are too much. You certainly know how to make a guy blush. But I thank you for every kind word. [This message has been edited by Topheth (edited 09-21-2001).] |
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