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A Prelude
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A Prelude |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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A Prelude seems rightly sensible allowing memory’s drift to fill in rifts of time, to decipher through suspended mist allowed to gather in elder eyes, looking back on way back when preambling that day was rightly one of the arousings, for mist’s recall, clear, pure as the fog it came in on, is still cleansing, a miasma of awakening, bearing ~*~ quiet inhale, hold, exhale of living met morn’s fog, before others’ arousal, a feel of cool on cool, pillow as chill as the foggy morn which seeped in through screens of canvassed flaps, and peering dark green leaves unified and hid amid dew’s gray, as closer than should be, bluebird perched, and mind recalls its beckon to break dawn, which would behind silver curtains hide, but still, bird trilled, enticing if not the sun, me small sounds of slow moving young bodies, stirring humid scents, soon to warm the chill with laughter, but not yet, not just yet… a smell of tang, bunked beds creak in cabined hibernation, somehow that mist that preludes dawn makes metal sing, certainly exuding reminders of copper, iron, and alloys, bent ~*~ so only the blue, fog, and I, cool on cool touched, existed, registering sounds wound round, feelings felt fine, pillow’s tick having let loose night’s hold so that all senses, then, brought here, now having known the gold of that day as it was unfolded still gleams yes, as is, and was, that morn of ’63, of then, was only the prelude to all tomorrows…. /pip/Forum44/HTML/000037.html [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-30-2001).] |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Sunshine, very nice indeed, much enjoyed. Thank you!  ~Marie~ |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh Sunshine, when you write like this my eyes fill up and memories flood I love this |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Karilea! Soft and lovely remember! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, this does indeed show many things. . . but most of all. . . your heart. . . it fits perfectly my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Sis, both were wonderful, that morn of 63...to walk back into time brings forth many wonderful happenings...very gentle smile |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
both are so beautiful done....thank you for sharing this fabulous piece my friend. Charisma |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
such a lovely piece. Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul.... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--and like in January, and many times before...this poem makes me want to hug you...and so I will. (((((((((((((((you)))))))))))))) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - You write so well, and carry so much from your heart onto the page. You are terrific. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
these are all the things that give us joy and reading and reflecting on them gives ME joy, thank you. [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-05-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Very nicely done, sweet poetess~ The more you write .. the more you should write~ Cause that's more we get to enjoy~ Thank you for sharing~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karilea, This just leaves me in such happy tears of remember. Thanks so much for this beautiful piece and for linking back to the other which I had not seen. ~warm Friday hugs, NancyLee~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful phrasing and sentiments Karilea ... the flow in this lovely piece is splendid, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What wonderful, kind, thoughtful comments you have all made on this poem. Thank you all so very much for the sharing of your thoughts, and of your hearts.... |
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