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The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03
Posts 818
USA

0 posted 2001-11-12 08:05 PM


(this muse isn't completely finished yet    




It all seems colder
after sundown.
Nothing seems new, only redone,
restored to wear
out again.

Anne realizes for a moment
that it was at the point
between night and day,
between day and night,
she is in the shadows.
The lukewarm
nothing;
deterioration
of all emotion,
at least
that’s how she feels.

She begins to slip out of her clothes,
first she escapes a mock
turtleneck
in several
sparks of electric charge,
leaving the aroma of her
lavender perfume with
it until wash day..
a faded rumpled pair
of torn Lee jeans
one chipped four-hole button and
was about to lose that.
undid her bra straps and stood there
gaping into the mirror.


She studies her form,
tilts her head back,
guides her hand
along her throat and sighs..
The sun is going down.

She is in the shadows.

But at that moment she feels
five years old again, awakening
for a sip of water
walking to the kitchen
and invariably asking her mother,

“Mommy, it hurts so bad, why,
why does it hurt so
bad?"

“Why does what hurt,
darling”

“Why does it hurt my eyes?  
The light?”

Anne knew, standing there feeling
nothing but her
own warmth, that when you
lose a love
you adjust to it for
awhile, until one finds you again.
Sometimes it still hurts for
awhile
until you allow yourself to stand
long enough in
the light.




-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

photo:http://www.childrenofsalem.com/days/kids/shawntay/willnewyearseve3

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 11-12-2001).]

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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
1 posted 2001-11-12 08:16 PM


Sometimes it still hurts for
awhile
until you allow yourself to stand
long enough in
the light.
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Dear Lady, Now you just KNOW I love this one!  The imagery is wonderful, and the picture fits so well.  THIS is one very enjoyable read, which I can really relate to.
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
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2 posted 2001-11-12 08:16 PM


Wow....this is superbly written...and the
ending done perfectly....I enjoyed reading
and absorbing this poem...Thank you.

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2001-11-12 08:25 PM


Outstanding storytelling, Kay.
Sandra

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2001-11-12 09:15 PM


Wow.  Eventually the light takes the edge off the coldness, but that takes some time.  Well done.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Midnitesun
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Gaia
5 posted 2001-11-12 09:34 PM


Thank goodness this muse is still busy! This is superb. The transition from grown woman to child and back again was so well done, it felt like a perfectly natural, 100% believable, reflective moment.

CHEERS!!! This is just one more reason why I want you to keep writing, and I really don't care how many pen names you use, everything you write is quality.

The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03
Posts 818
USA
6 posted 2001-11-13 11:25 AM


thanks all of you....if you like my writing that's all I could ask and I appreciate it.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-
Kathleen :)

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

7 posted 2001-11-13 06:52 PM


Anne knew, standing there feeling
nothing but her
own warmth, that when you
lose a love
you adjust to it for
awhile, until one finds you again

If I read all night, I won't relate anymore than I do to this.  (Well, except...my name's not Anne).

walker
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since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240
Florida
8 posted 2001-11-13 08:10 PM


Great expression of that feeling only love can give. Thanks.
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