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wornways
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since 2001-10-18

Posts 204
CA, USA

0 posted 2001-11-12 07:35 AM

i am nothing

well i know beyond a doubt i am nothing;
little more than human gout, i am nothing.

if i solved all riddles and life's mystery
and beautific wisdoms spout, i am nothing.

in all that was and all that ever will be,
no destiny can i flout, i am nothing.

each new dawn brings clarity of deeper truth;
grows my understanding stout, i am nothing.

voyages many i count in my annals,
but know more with each new bout i am nothing.

in spite of me swings creation right along;
so far as i can make out, i am nothing.

ego held by me is simply worth a damn,
for among god's imaged sprout i am nothing.

insignificant, along i go through life
finding as lost ways i scout, i am nothing.

my name, zahaar, just another floating name;
mid ten thousand tongues that shout, i am nothing

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

1 posted 2001-11-12 07:44 AM

I'm nothing special either ... just someone looking for something and it'll have to jump up and bite me before I find it

many thoughts to ponder here ... enjoyed your poem

angelswing
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since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

2 posted 2001-11-12 12:35 PM

Great poetry; Keep it up .
L.of.L. Tom .

'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

Apachecat906
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since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2001-11-12 02:53 PM

I enjoyed your poem. I don't know a heck uv a lot about poetry, but I know about this feeling, and so I will offer my praise on that note. I liked these lines especially:
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in spite of me swings creation right along;
so far as i can make out, i am nothing.

ego held by me is simply worth a damn,
for among god's imaged sprout i am nothing.

my name, zahaar, just another floating name;
mid ten thousand tongues that shout, i am nothing
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It's effective because it is not sentimental, imho. I wondered about the name Zahaar, what was the intent with that choice?

Go ahead, push your luck; find out how much love the world can hold

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 2001-11-12 09:09 PM

So these are ghazals...I'd never heard of that form before. Interesting, each couplet a poem unto itself, yet each a perfect part of the whole. Very well done!

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-11-12 09:25 PM

Nice work, wornways. Intersting form you write in. I like it.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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