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Sven
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0 posted 2001-11-11 10:13 PM


open light
radiates
from a
flowing
sun ray
into a
closed
room of
existence

filling
the soft
corners
with an
interplay
of the
shadows
of days
and the
dust of
years

swirling
and
shimmering
slowly like
diamond
flecks of
memory,
my hand
passes
through
them with
quiet
reflection

the light
continues
to glow
outside,
and
inside,
I
smile

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Startime
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1 posted 2001-11-11 10:15 PM


*sigh* such gentle reflection in your words. It was a pleasure to be there while you smile at the memories the day brought. I loved the feel of this poem, Sven. There was such a gentleness in it that I just sat here for a minute and let myself feel it. *sigh* BRAVO!!!


Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.


[This message has been edited by Startime (edited 11-11-2001).]

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2 posted 2001-11-11 10:17 PM


Sven,

    I love this   It has such a .. comforting feel.  I think that is the word I'm looking for.   It was greatly enjoyed.

Hugs,
Tara

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3 posted 2001-11-11 10:19 PM




(big hugggssssss) The beauty of memories fills your loving words, sweet John! (sigh) Your words are always so touching and wonderful to read, I love them! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet Sven! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Canada eh.
4 posted 2001-11-11 10:29 PM


Sven, I love this!  
The way it gently moves down the page and dances in front of my eyes.  
You KNOW I just love the presentation as well as the words.  
Enjoyed this tonight.  ~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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5 posted 2001-11-11 10:35 PM


*sigh*
Beautiful! Glad to know you're smiling if this is your reflection, Sweetness!

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

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6 posted 2001-11-11 10:53 PM


Sven, presenting this poem in the shape of a ray of sunlight is brilliant.(pun intended)

Your words always shine light on whatever subject you choose to write. Thank you.

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7 posted 2001-11-11 10:55 PM


Beautiful Sven! Wonderful phrasing throughout this tender and expressive piece. I really enjoyed this!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2001-11-11 11:01 PM


words which reflect such peace...enjoyed this
very much...Now I can sleep well tonite.

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9 posted 2001-11-12 09:57 AM


your words have such a peace to them....this is excellent, and given from such a gifted hand....  

Lauren~


*****


I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-12-2001).]

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10 posted 2001-11-12 11:26 AM


Yes, very soft and flowing. Enjoyed lots.
Sandra

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11 posted 2001-11-12 03:14 PM


When we can find something to smile about then life is good...James
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12 posted 2001-11-12 05:02 PM


soft and beautiful...

~Tier

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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
13 posted 2001-11-12 05:24 PM




and I'd smile too  

At this lovely tender piece written by you
where the sun rays play
and sing of the way.....


Lovely Sven....

Thank you
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Sven
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14 posted 2001-11-12 10:33 PM


thank you everyone. . .  

just been noticing the sun these past days. . . and the shadows. . . thanks for looking with me. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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