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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2001-11-12 09:51 AM

Golden embrace
of mother
ocean rocking
waves of
scarlet mist
upon the shore
deeper yet,
in search of
a long sleep
with pearl roads
and moonlit strands

The afternoon
sun touches
the hills,
filling my eyes
with beauty
did you know?
there are stars
below the sky
is that
eternity's last witness?
a heart beating
a life passing
a baby crying
souls
shinning through darkness
and still
the streets
reflect nothing
as the gray
rain covers
and spring breezes
make you drunk

The rain is
fire in the sky
I sing the storms
and watch as the
earth is born anew
and the woods
stand silent
cutting the
horizon since time
began

The ripple affect on the
water is calming
reflecting
the being of light in
spiral blue
~~~~

*****

I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-12-2001).]

texasrose
Member

since 2001-10-24

Posts 146

1 posted 2001-11-12 09:52 AM

Interesting and lovely. Good use of metaphors.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2001-11-12 09:58 AM

You paint a beautiful vision that comes to life as you gaze with the magic of wonder in your eyes. Absolutely stunning. I love it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Abigaile
Member

since 2001-10-21

Posts 112
San Mateo, CA

3 posted 2001-11-12 11:07 AM

Very well written. It really captures a powerful emotion. *SMILE*

"I am nae poet, in a sense;
But just a rhymer like by chance..."
-Robert Burns

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-11-12 01:55 PM

Lauren, this is amazing, I mean it. It's so tranquil.

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"
also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

5 posted 2001-11-12 02:07 PM

very very lovely.
great title.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2001-11-12 02:39 PM

Delicate and lovely thought you have woven in your words Lauren. Well done. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-11-12 10:30 PM

waves of
scarlet mist
upon the shore
deeper yet,
in search of
a long sleep
with pearl roads
and moonlit strands
==============================
did you know?
there are stars
below the sky
is that
eternity's last witness?
a heart beating
a life passing
a baby crying
souls
shinning through darkness
=================================
The ripple affect on the
water is calming
reflecting
the being of light in
spiral blue
==============================
"The ripple affect on the
water is calming"

as is your poety my friend...as are your softly cascading words...
L, this is sooo lovely....
I do so love the way your poetic mind whispers across the page.
*sigh*

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
In the sunlight, in the shadows ...
No ... I'll never stop looking for you.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-11-12 10:31 PM

no one paints those colors as well as you my friend. . .

indeed, your mind floats along on them. . . well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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