Open Poetry #16 |
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Love From Across A Busy Street... Pt. 1 |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA ![]() |
I saw her across a busy street Standing, quiet, elegant, in control. Long flowing hair, an occasional wisp. Dressed sensually, showing the right sights. Shifting from one gorgeous foot to the other A petite handbag accentuating a fullness. Eyes unseen from the distance. Seems as though might be a smile. I have to get there... I must cross. The street so busy, waiting for the light. Impatience starting to overwhelm me. My heart starting to beat even faster. The sudden awkward feeling in my gut. Come on....hurry....change now... A bus pulls between our sight, I cannot see. Will she still be there, will I meet Miss Right? Finally....running fast, weaving through bodies Arriving breathless as the bus pulls away... She is not there...Awwwww Man..... Where is she, where has this goddess gone? Searching frantically, like a rat in a maze. In one shop, nothing. Out and in another...still nothing... Breathless, dejected, giving up... Do you have the time? A voice behind me asks... Assailed by a fragrance from a thousand roses. Sensuality flowing through me as I turn to answer. Can this be my distant love? Will I get lucky? Eyes of deepest night, shimmering of starlight. Cheeks destined to be kissed, to be touched. A neck to hold during passions embrace. Shoulders to nuzzle and caress. Where has this love been, what have I missed? “Four-fifteen”, stammering like a boy on his first date. The eyes still shining, I detect an inquisitive look. Please eyes....don’t laugh at me....If you only knew.. Knew how nervous and excited I am right now. Knew what my heart is saying within my chest. I can only imagine she has encountered this before. A woman of such beauty would have a bastion to protect her. A legion of soldiers would stand guard over her bed as she slept. Wars of love have started and been won and lost for this sight. Men have sold their inner souls just to share a moment. And I, this mere mortal man, think I can convince her... Convince her that I want to know her, who she is... That I and not falling in lust, but in love...That I am sincere. Surely she could never believe this line... I would not if I were her... “Nice cologne”...the strumming of an Angel’s harp says to me.. “Thank you....your perfume is truly enjoyable too...” A bus comes before us....the opening door hisses. My heart racing. The angel climbs three steps....my eyes feasting curves... Looking back..... “Nice meeting you...hope to see you again.” Love grows on a busy street.... A fluttering heart waits for tomorrow... [This message has been edited by Magnus (edited 11-09-2001).] |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Magnus, Excellent job.You drew me into this one.I can see the whole thing now.Can't wait to hear the rest of it. Peaches |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: I know this could be a typo, but it still works for me, as does the whole of the poem...looking for more... |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) You always write the beauty of falling in love so wonderfully in your poetic prose! (big hugggsssss) I LOVE IT!!! I can't wait to see what tomorrow will bring! (sigh) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Sunshine...I corrected this...glad you liked the first of....who knows... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well get busy. I want to know where that bus goes! |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Patience is a virtue overcome by curiosity. Where does that bus go.......??? We shall see... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
AND?? Magnus! You know what this does to me...WOW! Write on!! ...and quickly,... please. ![]() Enjoyed, I did!! Coffee served in about an hour. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy...knowing you...I think you are going to have fits over this as it Draggggggs along....thanx for the coffee....glad you liked this. |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ok, I already know that she will be back for you, so there is nothing to worry about. Very intriguing though, and well written. Sandra |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gee Sandra...now the cat is really out of the bag (kidding)....thanx... |
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