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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2001-11-09 12:11 PM



She looks through me with broken eyes
The looking glass of her own device
Shattered pupils that once were wise
Now they’re splintered in her own demise

I am helpless, she’s breaking through
Flooding eyes that flicker blue
She could save me if she wanted too
But she says that our love is true

She’s a beggar in a soup parade
She would lie if her bed was made
I’m the one that her eyes dissuade
To believe that our debt is paid

I have nothing for it all seems waste
I would love her just to have a taste
Of fruitlessness found in love in haste
Might then her eyes would fill my face

She’s my lover, she’s my only friend
But our lives are based on false pretends
Since she’s had me I’ve had time to spend
The kind that filters into a timely end

I am frozen; her tears are breaking
Sow my eyes until they are aching
What she lost she's now retaking
Even though it’s all of her remaking

She’s a devil pouring eyes of red
Turned from purple where the blue once bled
She could love me but she will instead
Use her powers to invade my head

I will love her till the day we die
I can’t help it, I can’t even try
She has me inside her broken eyes
I can see her through a thousand lies


[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-09-2001).]

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2001-11-09 02:21 AM


Words of WOW indeed! Way Out Walt

Love to read this side of you m'friend.

Maree  

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2 posted 2001-11-09 02:21 AM


WOW is right.

'She’s a beggar in a soup parade
She will lie down if her bed is made
I’m the one of which her eyes dissuade
To believe me that our debt is paid'

This is only one part that stands out in my mind. WOW.

I refuse to highlight the entire poem.  

rwood
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3 posted 2001-11-09 07:11 PM


Very Profound Walt! I can see how you've experienced the many colors of the eyes within one person! Fabulous write!

Sincerely,
Regina

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4 posted 2001-11-09 07:20 PM


This is great Walt!! Enjoyed. Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2001-11-09 09:58 PM


Walt!! What are you doing? Writing like this? Oh man this is very good!!! Enjoyed it very much!    


Larry C
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6 posted 2001-11-10 12:24 PM


Walt,
Were you just saving up? Sorry you understand so much of a difficult relationship...but this is really well written stuff. Thanks. lc

elisaseyes
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7 posted 2001-11-10 11:05 AM


Thank goodness that this is just fiction huh Walt?  
cruz
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8 posted 2001-11-12 09:09 PM


For some reason this reminded me of that song by the bee gee's, "How Deep Is Your Love?"  The whole poem rocks.  You've done a marvel, comic!
Denise
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9 posted 2001-11-12 09:12 PM


Excellent, Walt, and I'm glad to see that it's fiction. Whew!
Sunshine
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10 posted 2001-11-13 12:06 PM



Your talents, astound...


Titia Geertman
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11 posted 2001-11-13 02:34 PM




Well Sir....

That's a WOW WOW

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/

Startime
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12 posted 2001-11-13 03:25 PM


WOW!!!!Bravo!!!!Now this is so powerful. I love it and it truly does rate WOWS!!!!!!!!

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2001-11-13 05:17 PM


Thank you all o yuhs!
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