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i thought i moved on but....
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i thought i moved on but.... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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You tried to grin but it came out as a grimace instead. You sat opposite me, tears rolling, trying hard to put on a strong front I averted my eyes, swore inwardly a little-- oh gosh, what was i supposed to do? I regretted for the first time ever that I don't bring tissues out with me You confided about your relationship problems I was sympathetic, made all appropriate responses, cracked a few jokes, tried to provide a constructive "male's perspective" (which was your wish) I guess i succeeded You expressed your gratitude profusely I only felt relieved that i never accused your guy of being a jerk or let on the fact that i once liked you [This message has been edited by faterider (edited 11-07-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the ending has a very strong impact...wow....this is great  |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I only felt relieved that i neither didn't accuse your guy of being a jerk or let on the fact that i once liked you I like this stanza the best...... as cool as you try to be, you finally told us what was troubling you |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow, this one is powerful. You had me on edge all the way through, but the ending...superb. Your poetry is always unique and well written. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
oh kaile..how that hurts...to be the one to stifle the inner-most feelings while you offer sweet friendship... written well... hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
faterider, I think we have all been here. It's so hard to sit and watch someone you have feeligs for be hurt.. especially when you know you would give them the world. *sighs* Oh this one bring back memories. Hugs, Tara |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, You write of such wounded emotion, you speak of consoling and emotionally supporting a friend who has suffered a loss but does not realize your own feelings for her. Thoughtfully written piece here. Thanks for sharing. Your friend, Dennis |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Aww  That just sucks.  I'm sorry bout the sitch, nice read tho. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
your words are so true. We have all been in this position..it is hard. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful expression...James |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanks for reading...i cringe upon reading the thread now because i think this poem really sucked...but i guess i needed to blow off steam that night... i appreciate the emotional support...thanks  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
LOL..we all need to blow off a little steam now and then....! hey..i wrote "navel lint"!!! rofl... anyway, what better place could you find to blow off steam...  hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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