Open Poetry #16 |
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Future Peers - The Debate |
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Sunshine
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Future Peers – The Debate bearing scrubbed attitudes and overloaded egos, stuffed full of rules and regs, bones still too young to mantle adulthood, males pocketing gangling hands their counterparts parting quips in hushed voices, too nervous to giggle, adopting voices yet grown into leaving behind yesterday’s titter still seen in glossed lips these were the debaters, then, amassed to convince volunteering judges how theories are perceived even as time quaked beneath them knowing that Newsweek’s printed seven days early of arrival date was their past, tense so who would be on top of top then that was the question, spit polished squeaking clean only bubble gum gave away the nervous, boys praying their voices held and sharing not a pimple among them some would seek zeniths, their stride coming sleekly, others would find nadir notes steeped blankness into preparation where did it go anticipation squirreling their guts volunteers are never paid enough to give losers some hope to cling to, none of them seeing 2, 3 or 4 as a possible choice, all eyes on 1 how bravely they grapple with topicality this ab(stract)use of mental aberration, overall being fresh in their anticipation, unlined faces feeling future in the breeze, even as they deal topically with this most recent explosion of their innocence how well they flamed red in their vivid white emotions to see the blue of tomorrow’s dreams competition claimed its end they gamely shook hands and began the process of packing it all in, on to another round, but the question begged of itself and came forth what are your future plans in day’s end, the volunteer judge came out the winner, for each and every child this day is planning a future, brightly America, you’re in good hands…. |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
...and, PIP, you're in good hands with poetry like this from Sunshine. ![]() This surpasses excellent, shiny one. ![]() |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggsssssss) My heart cries out to all those children who have lost their innocence, but also is proud of all these children who are living out their dreams even through these hard times! (big hugggssssss) BRAVO!!! Your beautiful compassionate shines in all your words, sweet Karilea! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet sunshine, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW!!! Judging is tough, and no one wants to leave a 'loser' in any contest. But they are already winners just for trying. It's a tough world out there, and I for one, am happy to see SUNSHINE smiling so brightly today. Hip hip hooray! ![]() |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Again you shed light with your word. This poem makes one think to learn there fore it is excellent in my opinion. Well done. ![]() ![]() Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
An excellent write, dear Sunshine... enjoyed reading! ~Tier |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
'Deer, this poem is nothing to the quality of young people that we can see, if we only look...thank you!... Yes, Noah, many of them still have their dreams, and it is up to the rest of us to make sure they have a good world to bring them in to...thank you! Midnitesun, you are so right...they are all winners, and again, it is up to us to make sure that they gain everything they pursue... Startime, if this poem makes you think? Then I've done my job! Thank you! Tiersdin, I've seen your work. An excellent from you is a badge worn with pride. Thank you... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--How did I miss this wonderful and uplifting poem?? I could feel the enthusiasm in your words! |
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