Open Poetry #16 |
Breathing the Dreams |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
The luminous foil It covers the sky I feel that we’re here Just so we can die You’re taking me out You put me back in Thought you would kill me You’d kill me again I’m breathing the steam Of a thousand dead dreams I’m breathing the dreams I’m breathing the dreams I wasn’t that pleasant When first you arrived So what do you think That might have survived Now that I’m lifeless You stir me around Pick up the pieces That fell on the ground From out of the cold And into the heat You’re taking my heart And then you repeat Our love has a taste Of bitter rebirth Why do you save me What is my worth I’m breathing the steam Of a thousand dead dreams I’m breathing the dreams I’m breathing the dreams Now I can see through The luminous seams To see that we’re breathing A thousand dead dreams |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, pretty heartfelt write here Walt. It plays along like a sad song. I hope those dreams come to life again soon. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this a lot Walt. It's a bit different than your norm but well worth the read. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I enjoyed reading this Walt. This is very good. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
heheh thanky yuh i was inside the theatre waiting for my kid to get out of acting class and yuh the theater is this big octogonal dome and in the inside it is lined with well what looks like alluminum foil and I wondered what it be like to live on a dish in the fridge yuh. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Walt - Wow. I really like this one, really nice. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Cool write Walt...Enjoyed, I did!! Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I agree with Poet Devine that this is a different style from you - but, I really like it! A powerful write, Walt - Wow! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Casa Manana eh? Been sitting under the heat lamp too long? I like this Walt. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
A thousand dead dreams.....that's so many Walt...but you have millions. A really nice flow from you...Painfull...but very connecting to reality...which ultimately we are...but still dream my friend. Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very good piece here....I like it!!!! sounds like a thrash song.....nice job...J |
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