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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I need to say I love you to someone today someone who won’t use it against me later someone who will hear it as it’s said someone who knows I don’t need to hear it back just to say I love you as a child innocently accepts your lap as a man lies his head upon your shoulder |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
speechless, totally blubbering speechless. ~~~~~those words should never be used against anyone...they are far too precious. Well done.... -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Oh, I am sure this will be well heard.... very well heard.... |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
someone who will hear it as it’s said Duncan, I love you...... and all the soul of your heart.... Look into the eyes of a man and |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Duncan, say it to yourself(you'll never use it against yourself) It's so good to be loved, but hey, some people don't appreciated. Love this one. [This message has been edited by walker (edited 11-02-2001).] |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Ahhh the L word. Tis very important, and should be used sparingly. I hope one day you can find that worthy individual.  Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh I do love this. It speaks to so much of my heart. Sandra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Duncan, this sweet and short little expression does so much. You have said well what some take volumes to attempt. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Duncan, Oh, this is soooo tender, and oh so touching and ...sensitive...yes, it is so nice to hear a sensitive man speak. Enjoyed! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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LoveLetters Junior Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 35State of Hope |
This touches with fingers of sincerity. Its beautiful. Love has many masks. I am but one of them. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Is it me? Or is this one of the most stunning poems I’ve seen? No, it’s one of the most stunning poems I’ve seen. It certainly left me lost for words, and it is, beyond doubt, my newest favourite by you. Someone can hear the words I love you And hear them exactly as you meant them too Just whisper the words as you lean on her shoulder Then take her in your arms and gently just hold her If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
no, Tracey, it's not just you, it is stunning. I had to come back and read it again. Left me with such a wonderful feeling. Your someone is very blessed! -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I agree with what everyone else is saying. This poem is stunning in its simplicity. I love it. I am sure you are very much loved and I can see by the responses here that indeed you are loved. *KOTC*Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am SO smiling here Duncan----I just got back and hadn't checked out the forum, and the synchronicity? well, even if unintentional, it sparked my heart, I thank you.  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
And when you said I love you It reached a thousand ears Thousand hearts are ticking Thousand eyes filled with tears Three simple words I love you You needed just to say I heard them sweet dear Duncan And I'll return them if I may Thank you for this beautiful verse Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Duncan, Excellent write! Important thoughts. Sin isn't fair, but God got even, grace isn't fair either. larry c |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This reminded me of some song lyrics, "Lay your head upon my shoulders, Hold your warm and tender body next to mine" Isn't it nice to know there are so many great shoulders here at this site? You won't run out of shoulders in this century, although I'm sure there's one pair in particular that you had in mind. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I'm sure your wait will not be a long one, Duncan... Touching write... *smiles* ~Tier |
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