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Open Poetry #16

before forever

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-10-31 07:55 AM

I loved him. My GOD.
---intricate;
the semi-colon
of my thoughts--
and laughingly,
my editor-
as I re-read
the the things I ought.
I heard him in say
with "sharpie" tongue--

"What the hell is that?"

and then I said,
"I just dont know..."
he replied to me:
"You SHOULD.
Did you not just clean your brush?
You should know the paints--the touch!"
And shame on me for then
I blushed
admitting to the floor in hush
that even lust not be enough...
Finally, I'd found my trust.

and I have loved him ever since
before forever did commence.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

1 posted 2001-10-31 09:38 AM

What a wonderful poem. You have said it so very well.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2001-10-31 03:40 PM

Luscious,an emotional and intense write m'dear. I especially loved the last two lines

and this .....admitting to the floor in hush

Wonderful!

Maree

Robert A
Member

since 2001-10-29

Posts 174

3 posted 2001-11-01 01:26 PM

ok, that last line really got to me!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-11-01 02:28 PM

1derful analogy contained herein.
Well done

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2001-11-01 02:35 PM

Excellent write...enjoyed! Nancy.

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2001-11-01 07:39 PM

Very nicely done....so intriguing in your
ways of expression.

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