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Heart-in-a-grinder-day |
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Hollowman Member
since 2001-06-01
Posts 117 |
With her careless words she cut me down to a mass of minced up love When all along I sang a song that 'twas us fitting like a glove No sorrow in her incinuations no compassion to listen to my words My love dies a slow death my corpse is picked to bits by birds Yes I loved her with a power of a thousand lightning shocks sadly the boat of time was smashed upon her verbal rocks I stand and watch mouth wide open as the malice falls from her lips and now inside me lies my heart its grave with a thousand ships On last chance maybe so will she realise me for what I am a kind, loving, caring, caring gentle-man Shall not hold hold my breath for long as her love waivers in the wind and time repeats this lesson for me a time to begin..... Rebuilding the fortress inside me this one with thicker walls than ever before no openings, no holes in my defence and plenty of rocks a-shore No one to let into my worlds keep them all now at bay a broken heart really hurts hurts me this very day..... Richard P "I write cos I can, I write cos I do, I write to make you feel, a bit of me in you" Rich |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
It's too sad, but she ain't worth another thought. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Much sorrow here, Hollowman. It is never easy to love and lose, yet somehow we must find the strength to try again. You just never know what the future will hold. Nicely done. All writing comes |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
My heart though bitter bled t'was not for you, but me instead how does one say, "I love you true" & have not the means to follow through? you think me heartless, cruel, unkind? peer closer love, I'm sure you'll find sadness deeper than oceans blue simply on account of you I well know if I should stay I'd cause you sorrow everyday for I am contradictions, pain I am tempests, thunder, rain I am woman, little girl lost I'm burdens with a heavy cost my face is lovely, I am told but surface beauty cannot hold the heart of one but for a time before it begins to lose it's shine inner beauty is what I crave but none I'll carry to my grave so I free you with my words of hate hollow, empty words, irate I find peace to know you're free to find true love eventually In the shadows I'll allow these tears to mourn your loss year after year... A poetic response to such a painfilled poem. Enjoyed reading your work as always.. *smiles* ~Tier 10/01 |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I don't know if it helps, but I know a man just like this woman, he did the same damn thing, exactly. I don't know how someone you love can be so heartless. But there it is. Maybe we should fix them up..They deserve eachother. Peace. Sandra |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is really heartfelt writing Richy. Very sad subject, but you have really written this very well. One of your best I think. It's very moving If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Hollowman Member
since 2001-06-01
Posts 117 |
- thank you all so much, and I am taken by the poetic reply, this in itself shows that pictures can be painted by words - I really thank you all for your words - thank you - I write for you all Richy x |
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