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snowpants
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0 posted 2001-10-24 07:19 PM




There’s something aflame on my shore tonight--
Don’t you see the immense peace you’ve placed in my soul?
I once stood before the ocean, wondering about truth;
Now, when the moon begins to rise,
I won't try to avoid what lies ahead;
I watch the storm in the distance, not apprehensive of the thunder.

There’s something amiss on your horizon tonight--
Won’t you make use of the stars you’ve put in my spirit?
You once awoke to my face, gazing into infinite barrenness;
When the sun painted its masterpiece,
You never needed to run from the morning’s intent;
You took my world in your hands, not considering the thorns.

There will never be anything lost between us in this life--
Won’t you look into the eyes of what we’ve created?
We once walked along the edge, uncertain of the future;
Now, when the clouds take over our clear blue,
We’ll stare into the face of life’s instructive message;
We’ll eternally absorb one another, not influenced by the obstacles.

-kh

*dedicated to Mark - thanks for the buuuuuckets, baby...

And did you know with the rain in your pockets,
you can change the weather...

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2001-10-24 07:32 PM


Hi snowpants   .....

I really liked this, especially these  images....

There’s something aflame on my shore tonight--

When the sun painted its masterpiece

Fantastic!

Maree  

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2 posted 2001-10-24 08:43 PM


Lovely and hopeful. I hope it all goes well.
Sandra

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3 posted 2001-10-24 08:58 PM


LittleMissSnowPants~
Well, all I've got to say is that if the 'Cowboy' couldn't mosey in here himself, he sure sent one heck of a beautifully inspired piece through you~

I LOVE these tender thoughts from your heart~
And Maga will love them too~
*Hugs* by the bunches~
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
     noles1@totcon.com                

[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 10-24-2001).]

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2001-10-24 09:03 PM


Absolutely beautiful sp, and just the most perfect pictures.  Reminds me of my own Cowboy, but we don't call him mark!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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5 posted 2001-10-24 10:54 PM


There’s something aflame on my shore tonight--
Don’t you see the immense peace you’ve placed in my soul?

I once stood before the ocean, wondering about truth;
Now, when the moon begins to rise,
I won't try to avoid what lies ahead;
I watch the storm in the distance, not apprehensive of the thunder.

There’s something amiss on your horizon tonight--
Won’t you make use of the stars you’ve put in my spirit?
==============================
We’ll stare into the face of life’s instructive message;
We’ll eternally absorb one another, not influenced by the obstacles.
==================================

well Im thinkin it s a good thing youre not apprehensive of that thunder...
seeings how a certain Aquarian cowboy seems to feel the need to ride INTO the storm     
BUT all blah blah blah aside (hehe)
you KNOW I love this one...
ya got some very groovy phrases and images in here..but then how could ya not...
with such GROOVY inspiration     
and hey...how NICE of your server to let you online     LOL
very cool poem of anticipation and promise.
diggin the title too  
well done poetess flakebooty  

ps...about that signature...
I had rain in my pockets today...
all it did was ruin me shirt...  
ACK...nevermind  
*robbie rules*

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-24-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-10-25 12:06 PM


This was simply beautiful - and your images and graphics complimented each other so well, much enjoyed.

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

Aimster
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7 posted 2001-10-25 08:58 PM


Kris,


beautiful hon! since first reading your work, i can honestly say your writing has grown by leaps and bounds. exquisite imaery and writing...your words pain such a lovely picture for all to read. take care m'friend.


amy
~~~~~

"I could kiss you in
the rain forever.
Turn all of your pain to pleasure
Fill up your days with
sunlight, make the
passion last every night"

snowpants
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8 posted 2001-10-26 08:39 PM


Maree:  thanks so much...good to see ya...glad you liked it!  

Sandra:  thanks, m'friend...and, I am most certain that it will!  thanks!  

Marge:  ohhh, he always does...thanks so much...I'm happy you liked this!  

GS:  thanks!  glad you liked it!  

J:  yeah, seriously...can't ya see us twirlin' around in that tornado??     and, yeah, I will have to thank msn for their graciousness...ack...thanks, girlie...definitely the GROOVIEST inspiration!     

Mysteria:  thank you so much...glad you enjoyed it!  

Aims:  hey girlie...thanks so much for the wonderful reply...your words are a great compliment!  glad you liked this!  

sp  

And did you know with the rain in your pockets,
you can change the weather...

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