Love on swaying rails (A sonnet)

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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

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South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2001-10-20 11:56 AM

Deepest of passion flowing  through veins thin
soft fingers caressing covered smooth  skin
Tender lips leaving love’s salacious trails
Beds sway  gracefully on two silver  rails

Heartbeats depart on a shining lover’s  train
passion dance melody  they can’t restrain.
Sighs of bliss echoing from smooth car walls
Luscious ride on two rails through lucid falls

Lover's gaze caressing core of two souls
climbing  to the sky on a train that rolls
Sensual sight’s view flying by outside
Two shadows embraced on a swaying ride

Two tickets to a lustful lover’s feast.
Take a trip on the silver sided beast

[This message has been edited by Magnus (edited 10-20-2001).]

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

1 posted 2001-10-20 12:01 PM

*sigh* this wonderful poem combines so much I love. It is a sonnet and I love sonnets and it is about love and told with such incredibly sensual romance that flows from your pen with such grace. Can you guess? I love it, of course.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2001-10-20 12:05 PM

(sigh) Oh Magnus, this is so so beautiful; your beautiful tales of train rides are always so beautiful and lovely! (big hugggssssss) You are a true romantic to us all! (smiles) Have a beautiful day, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-10-20 12:38 PM

YES!! You found it right? This is the other part? But, those sleeper car beds are not that big you know?
Swaying and sensual...
...you KNOW I liked!
~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-10-20 12:44 PM

Magnus,
A very nice write, enjoyed.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2001-10-20 03:13 PM

No...those beds are not that big Nancy....
I guess one would just have to improvise,
wouldn't they? thanx..

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2001-10-20 03:14 PM

Thanx Seymour, happy that this was a good
read for you.

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

7 posted 2001-10-20 03:51 PM

Ah the beauty of love. Something we all strive for and it is wonderful to see the beauty of the emotion depicted so eloquently.

Dawn

SEA

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with you

8 posted 2001-10-20 04:01 PM

Magnus~ whew....

this is too good.....

I love it!!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2001-10-20 04:04 PM

Thank you Dawn....Sonnets are not easy for me. I struggled a little trying to get it
to have the right meter, the right rhyme,
the words that made sense...They can be
very challenging....Getting comments that
are nice....make the effort worth it...
thank you...

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

10 posted 2001-10-20 07:07 PM

Magnus, you caught my attention as I love sonnets. I also struggle with them but they are worth it in the end

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2001-10-20 09:01 PM

I certainly don't feel alone now....and I
do thank you for your kind words.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2001-10-20 09:04 PM

Susan,,sorry I missed replying to your post.
thanx...you have enthusiastically given me
so many kind words.

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

13 posted 2001-10-21 09:43 AM

A very swaying Sonnet..I envy such deliverance...I've never connected one yet with my verse...It is something I will strive to try...as this was really moving!

Sincerely,
Regina

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

14 posted 2001-10-21 09:47 AM

Thanx Regina....these little devils can be
fun and so very exasperating....

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

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On A Journey To The Unknown

15 posted 2001-10-21 09:56 AM

Such a beautiful poem this is. I just love it.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

16 posted 2001-10-21 10:58 AM

Thanx Smartchick, don't know your name...
but appreciate your comments...thank you.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

17 posted 2001-10-21 01:31 PM

Wowzers, Magnus, this is so sensually beautiful! I enjoyed this very much!~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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