Open Poetry #16 |
Last Reflection |
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Today I packed the remnants of the life I’ve come to know I sifted through the rubble of the past... Then sorted out the treasures that I saved, so long ago When I still thought that we would always last... I sat inside a circle of old memories, scattered ‘round The ghosts of hopes and dreams that we once knew... I closed my eyes to meditate, and suddenly I found Reality once hidden, now full view... The curtain pulled, I saw us for the people, that we are And how we both had taken seperate paths... Although we struggled, effort hadn’t brought us very far... And what we had, was never meant to last... So, here we are, the day before I spread my wings and fly My heart has found a home, it’s waiting there... With nothing left here for me, and with no tears left to cry My last reflection vanished into air... The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, sunnyone, I do like this. It has an air of acceptance, and knowing when it's time to move forward. Cheers. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
yes, it has an air of saddness, but also of hope and new beginnings? -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
A poem, correct? Just a poem? Well done, Sunnyone... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I hope you are not experiencing this right now...you have painted a picture too often developed. So many lives broken apart from a lack of a common bond. Thanx for a beautiful and reflective poem. I liked this even though it is very sobering. |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Sunny I really love these words. They say so much of what is really felt. Very nicely done. I shall keep this one! "Today I packed the remnants of the life I’ve come to know I sifted through the rubble of the past... Then sorted out the treasures that I saved, so long ago When I still thought that we would always last... I sat inside a circle of old memories, scattered ‘round The ghosts of hopes and dreams that we once knew... I closed my eyes to meditate, and suddenly I found Reality once hidden, now full view..." Reality - what a sobering thought! But I know that you will be very happy with your beginnings. A |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sad and yet hopeful. I wish you well and much happiness. Nice work! Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Filled with understanding of the past and a strength to move into a new future. Very well done. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SunnyOne~ So good to see you. A 'remembering' poem ... they always make me want to reach out and hug someone~ {{Hug}}} ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Gotta ditto Marge here...so look out, here I come...{{{{{{hhhhuuuuuuuuuggggggggs!!!}}}} jwesley |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Very well done with excellent cadence and near songlike rhythm. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ To all of my friends here ~~~ First of all, thank you each and every one for the responses to this poem! And I will say that it is not just a poem, but a piece of my own reality. There comes a time in one's life, when changes are inevitable, and I am at that crossroads. The past has completed it's cycle, and a new door has opened. I have been blessed with a very special new love, and it will reflect in my work, of that I am sure. So, once again, thank you so much for all of your support, and best wishes, and I will be thinking of you all as I fly across the sky into my new life!! Will see you soon here at our family table! ~~~ Sunny ~~~ The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Sunnyone, spread your wings and fly, I'm sure you will triumph in love and life. Congatulations on love and a new start. I'll keep an eye on your poetry, love is wonderful. |
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