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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-10-14 07:35 AM

Emotions are smoke,
Grasped best when sleeping,
Then caught with pen stroke,
Ink on paper for keeping.

Dreams drift into my waking,
Thoughts like smoke,
Emotions there for taking,
If only captured by pen,
Words like smoke,
Quickly drifts before I send
Them to paper so to hold,
Drifts away,
So half written I do fold
Placing under my pillow,
In the day,
Hope to finish tomorrow.

Gloom

[This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 10-14-2001).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-10-14 07:48 AM

Words are like the elusive smoke, indeed, and sometimes, most times, it is just like this...

well done! 'Tis a Keeper!

Suzanne Arlene
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 377
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2001-10-14 08:05 AM

I have lots of till tomorrow poems.I guess my words floated away to fast. Great poem
Suzanne

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2001-10-14 10:53 AM

What a wonderful way to put it. I can sometimes see them drifting away on the slightest breeze just out of my reach. BRAVO!!!This is unique and very well said.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2001-10-14 10:57 AM

This is wonderful Professor Gloom! You've captured these sentiments so vividly ... one's I can so completely relate with. Well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2001-10-14 11:43 AM

Your work is always strikingly sad, but very good in my opinion. I loved this, especially the ending. :-)

*Jenn*

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2001-10-22 06:06 PM

so if I were to peek under your pillow would I find all these half written thoughts...hmm what a treasure that would be

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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