Open Poetry #16 |
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The Sound of Night |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
The Sound of Night Dusk drew her mark around the harbor and filled it with the sound of a band down wind, hot and filled with drum of blues it pulsed down the path where boats drew down and lapped and quiet sighed. I was drawn toward the sound of night from the light and a patio looking into a photo opportunity, yet, German Shepherd waited in patience at the door to a tiny bar and dance floor where the rhythm of hot night pulsed and dancers loved openly in movement so sensual the blues, the blues, the blues so torched my eyes drew towards the coupling in want. I sat and watched the day die down out the opening of the sultry floor and the guitar played and the voice was old, yet, new in me so wanting, wanting to dance. And then the night ended, the set was done and the men in whom I saw Nam grew quiet and still and all around was the beginning and the end and they stood in silhouette against the stage hand to heart some and others salute in proud and the band played and the voices rose in song, The National Anthem so strummed and sung tears were in the words. Dusk drew her mark around the harbor and filled it with the sound of a band down wind, hot and filled with drum of blues it pulsed down the path where boats drew down and lapped and quiet sighed. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Unbelievable, Martie. You have the most incredible way of painting a word picture, full of so many different emotions. "And then the night ended, the set was done and the men in whom I saw Nam grew quiet and still and all around was the beginning and the end" I see them in front of me right now, and I hear the music. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Martie, there are some things in life that engrave deeply in the mind and soul, never to leave, you placed this very well of a time and place that could not have been a year ago..very gentle smile..loved this write |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Martie .. you've placed a picture and scene in my mind that I think shall stay with me for a very long time ... beautifully written! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dusk drew her mark around the harbor and filled it with the sound of a band down wind, =========================== to a tiny bar and dance floor where the rhythm of hot night pulsed and dancers loved openly in movement so sensual the blues, the blues, the blues so torched my eyes drew towards the coupling in want. I sat and watched the day die down out the opening of the sultry floor and the guitar played and the voice was old, yet, new in me so wanting, wanting to dance. And then the night ended, the set was done and the men in whom I saw Nam grew quiet and still and all around was the beginning and the end and they stood in silhouette against the stage hand to heart some and others salute in proud and the band played and the voices rose in song, The National Anthem so strummed and sung tears were in the words. ================================ you never fail to amaze and impress ... this is such an awesome write...such an impressive level of inspire... kiss that muse of yours...once for me ![]() We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your muse touched your pen with heart again... and of course, you gave us a keeper... |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Thank you for taking me to a place I wish I had been~ You just are the best~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You sail your words like butterflies. Full of color and hews, That sets a wile and smile on my face. Well done *L* Sy |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
You have caught the magic of the night in here with your words. I like idea of them singing the anthem, but I liked it just as well without that reference (just a humble opiniion) because how many times have we all been caught "watching" at night? I guess I missed your full point, but hey, that's what readers are for right? lol anyway, great poem... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Midnite--I'm glad this became real to you, it was what I wanted. Logan--Timing is everything...thankyou for loving this. Kit--Your words always mean a great deal to me. Janet Marie--You always make me smile. Karilea--Yes, there was heart...thank you for seeing it. Marge--I wish you had been there too! Sy--If I can set a wile and smile on your face...wow! That's great! Apache--Point...hmmm, I guess it was to try and describe a moment of heart that meant a great deal to me, so you could see it too. I'm glad you liked the poem. |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Oh I did like It a lot. I hope you didnt take my reply wrong, I just got caught up in a feeling and then was thrown when you went somewhere with it. I have a habit of going off on my own track before I listen to what was intended. I liked it in several ways, that is what I meant to say. :0 |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"tears were in the words." The tears found their way from the words to my cheeks... This is superb, Martie... and so real I could smell the sea. |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Martie, very beautiful, filled with my favorite things. Smell that ocean air! ![]() ~enjoyed~ ![]() smiles ~Marie~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie...I just love the way you draw the reader in and it's like watching a movie your imagery is so wonderful. Incredible write my friend. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Martie, I was there! Wow you pulled me right into the poem. my favourite lines... Dusk drew her mark around the harbor and filled it with the sound of a band down wind, hot and filled with drum of blues it pulsed down the path where boats drew down and lapped and quiet sighed. and dancers loved openly in movement so sensual the blues, the blues, the blues so torched and the men in whom I saw Nam grew quiet and still and all around was the beginning and the end Excellent imagery Martie! Beautiful writing ![]() Maree ![]() [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 10-09-2001).] |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A bit of all that excited me, saddened me, and also made me smile has been already said, so I will simply say, this had your signature on it like no other I have ever read, and yes, it is a keeper that is for sure. Wonderful job on this one Martie, you had me the entire time. ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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